Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接并注意时态一致与单复数。控制句子数量（不超过5句），使用连接词使表达更连贯，并提供更具体的细节（如活动类型、频率或特殊回忆）。注意语法：park应为parks或the park；“so much activities”改为“so many activities”；动词时态一致（enjoyed / went / made）。

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child because the air was very clean and I went there almost every weekend with my friends and family. We often played football, flew kites and had picnics, so there was always something to do. Those visits were refreshing and usually left me feeling energetic for the rest of the day.

제안: 回答要注意冠词和单复数（the park / opportunities）。避免重复词（'however'与'but'重复功能）。提供具体频率和具体活动细节，并尽量用连词自然衔接。把不确定语气改为更清晰的陈述。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to the park, but I don't have many opportunities because I'm busy with my studies and a part-time job. Occasionally, I go there to read books or take a short walk, which helps me relax and refresh my mind before returning to work.

제안: 句子结构需更清晰，避免重复和错误短语（如“it fares more parks there”不通顺；重复词“It it”）。给出具体理由并用连接词组织观点，例如环境、健康与社区价值。注意词汇准确性（‘fewer’/‘more’应用场景）。

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide free spaces for people to relax and exercise. Moreover, more parks would mean more trees and cleaner air, which is beneficial for public health and the local environment.

제안: 回答应更简洁并补充具体细节（公园名称、特色、为什么想去）。避免模糊或重复（“It makes me feel”不完整），‘ethereal’词汇使用需谨慎并解释其含义。总句数控制在五句内并使用连接词衔接。

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a famous park in the capital city called Central Garden. I saw many photos online showing its wide flower beds, large lake and traditional pavilions. It looks very peaceful and almost dreamlike, so I hope to go there to take pictures and enjoy a calm walk.

× Yes, I enjoyed going to park when I was a child because the air there was really clean and I often go to the park with my friends or family.

✓ Yes, I enjoyed going to the park when I was a child because the air there was really clean and I often went to the park with my friends or family.

句中缺少定冠词“the”，應為“going to the park”。另外，句子描述的是過去習慣，時態需一致，將後半句“I often go to the park”改為過去式“I often went to the park”。建議：描述過去習慣時，全句使用過去時態，並在提到特定場所時使用定冠詞。

× There are so much activities to do and we always had a lot of fun there.

✓ There are so many activities to do and we always had a lot of fun there.

“activities”是可數名詞複數，應使用量詞“many”而不是“much”。建議：可數名詞用many，不可數名詞用much。

× It is refreshing and it always make me energetic.

✓ It was refreshing and it always made me energetic.

前文談論兒時經驗，應使用過去時：將“is”改為“was”，並修正主謂一致“it always make”為過去式“it always made”。建議：敘述過去經歷時，保持整句過去時且注意動詞變化。

× Yes, I still enjoy going to park now but I don't really have much opportunities because I'm busy with my study and part time jobs.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy going to the park now but I don't really have many opportunities because I'm busy with my studies and part-time jobs.

“going to park”缺少定冠詞“the”，且“opportunities”為可數複數，應用“many”而不是“much”。“study”在此語境應用複數“studies”表示學業；“part time jobs”建議連字成“part-time jobs”。建議：場所前加定冠詞，區分可數/不可數並注意複數形式與複合形容詞連字。

× But sometime however I still have a chance so I will go there and read books there and maybe I will refresh my mind.

✓ However, sometimes I still have a chance, so I will go there to read books and maybe refresh my mind.

“But sometime however”中有重複連接詞且“sometime”拼寫/用法不當，應為“sometimes”。句子結構冗長且“and maybe I will refresh my mind”可簡化為“maybe refresh my mind”。建議：避免重複連接詞，注意副詞“sometimes”的正確形式，使用更流暢的連接方式。

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because everyone can go there and relax and it fares more parks there.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because everyone can go there and relax and it means more parks there.

原句“it fares more parks there”語意不通，“fare”用法不當，應改為“means”表達“這代表會有更多公園”。此句也涉及詞彙使用錯誤，而非量詞，但仍需修正為正確動詞。建議：檢查動詞搭配與語意，使用“means”來表示“這意味著”。

× It it means there will be more trees, so it's also good for the environment.

✓ It means there will be more trees, so it's also good for the environment.

句首有重複“It it”。刪除重複詞即可。建議：寫作時檢查重複或多餘的詞語。

× Yes, there is a park that I would like to visit in my future.

✓ Yes, there is a park that I would like to visit in the future.

慣用表達為“in the future”而非“in my future”。“my future”通常指個人未來的人生，而此處指一般將來時間。建議：使用慣用搭配“in the future”。

× It is in the capital city of our country.

✓ It is in the capital city of our country.

此句語法無誤，保持不變。無需修改。

× I've seen some pictures of it on the Internet.

✓ I've seen some pictures of it on the Internet.

此句使用現在完成時描述過去經驗，與語境相符，無需修改。建議保持。

× It is beautiful and it makes me feel like very ethereal.

✓ It is beautiful and it makes me feel very ethereal.

“feel like very ethereal”中的“like”用法不當。應直接用“feel very ethereal”或更自然地表達為“it makes me feel as if I'm in a dream”。建議：避免在“feel”後不必要使用“like”來連接形容詞，或改用更自然的比較結構。

× It makes me feel.

✓ It makes me feel that it's dreamlike.

原句不完整，缺少賓語或補語，導致句子不完整。需要補充描述以完成意思，例如“that it's dreamlike”或“very calm”。建議：確保句子有完整的賓語或補語來表達感受。