Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and use correct tense and grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence (past tense), then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid repetition and false starts.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I often went there with my siblings to play on the swings and climbs, and we spent hours racing each other on the grass, which made weekends very fun.

제안: Answer directly using present simple and explain reasons with linking words. Use one topic sentence then one supporting detail and a brief reason or example. Avoid hesitations and fragmented sentences.

예시: Not really. These days I prefer staying indoors because I enjoy reading and playing video games; for example, I usually spend evenings finishing a novel or playing strategy games online.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and one example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' correctly and avoid repeating phrases.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide green space where people can relax and exercise. For example, an extra park near my neighborhood would give families a place to walk and children a safe area to play.

제안: Name the park clearly and give one or two specific details about why you want to visit. Use correct prepositions and avoid filler words.

예시: Yes, I want to visit Safari Park in Lahore because it has a large wildlife area and a mini-zoo. I would like to see animals from close up and learn more about conservation programs there.

× To be honest, I like to going to a park in my childhood because it was so much fun in park.

✓ To be honest, I liked going to parks in my childhood because it was so much fun to be in a park.

The student mixes present tense 'like' with a past time expression 'in my childhood'; use past tense 'liked'. 'to going' is incorrect: after 'liked' use the gerund 'going'. Use plural 'parks' or 'a park' consistently and add article 'a' before 'park'. Also use 'be in a park' or 'play in the park' for natural phrasing. Suggested improvement: Match verb tense to time reference (past for childhood) and use correct verb patterns: like + gerund.

× I love to play with my siblings in a playground and I love to and I.

✓ I loved playing with my siblings on the playground.

The original repeats phrases and mixes present 'love' with past context; simplify and use past tense 'loved' to match 'childhood'. Use 'play + -ing' after 'love' (or 'loved playing'). 'on the playground' is the correct preposition. Remove the incomplete fragment 'and I love to and I'. Suggested improvement: Avoid repetition, complete thoughts, and keep tense consistent.

× To be honest, I'm not too much interested to going apart or do fun with my siblings or any other people.

✓ To be honest, I'm not too interested in going to parks or having fun with my siblings or other people.

Use 'not too interested' instead of 'not too much interested'. After 'interested' use the preposition 'in' plus a gerund: 'interested in going'. 'to going' is incorrect. 'apart' is a typo for 'a park' or should be 'parks'; corrected to 'parks'. Use 'having fun' instead of 'do fun'. Suggested improvement: Learn fixed expressions: 'interested in + -ing' and 'have fun'.

× I preferred. I preferred what I preferred staying indoors, like reading a book and playing a video game.

✓ I preferred staying indoors, like reading books and playing video games.

The repetition 'I preferred. I preferred what I preferred' is redundant. 'Preferred' is past tense which can be kept, but make a single clear sentence: 'I preferred staying indoors'. Use gerunds after 'preferred': 'preferred staying'. Use plural 'books' and 'video games' for general activities. Suggested improvement: Avoid redundant clauses and use gerund objects after verbs like 'prefer'.

× I would like to see many parks in my country or in my city because park, because many people going park in the evening to feel relaxed and calm.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city because many people go to parks in the evening to feel relaxed and calm.

Use 'more parks' to indicate increase. 'many people going park' is ungrammatical: use simple present 'go' for habitual actions and include preposition 'to' with 'park' -> 'go to parks'. Remove redundant 'because park'. Suggested improvement: Use simple present for habitual facts and correct verb forms: subject + base verb ('people go').

× So yeah, park going to park and seeing park is a good option in my city.

✓ So yes, going to parks and spending time there is a good option in my city.

Original has awkward word order and repetition. Use natural gerund phrase 'going to parks' and more natural 'spending time there'. Replace casual 'So yeah' with 'So yes' if desired. Suggested improvement: Rearrange to a clear subject and verb, avoid repeating the same noun.

× Yes, I would like to go in Safari Park, which is located in Lahore in in those in this park, number is wild animals are kept like a zoo.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to Safari Park, which is located in Lahore; in this park, many wild animals are kept, like in a zoo.

Use preposition 'go to' not 'go in'. Correct article and phrasing: 'in this park' rather than repeated words. 'number is wild animals are kept' is ungrammatical; use 'many wild animals are kept'. Add 'like in a zoo' for comparison. Use semicolon or separate clauses for clarity. Suggested improvement: Use correct prepositions with 'go' and simple, direct clause structure: 'in this park, many wild animals are kept'.