Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Perbaiki tata bahasa dasar dan kejelasan. Gunakan kalimat topik yang langsung menjawab pertanyaan, lalu beri satu atau dua detail spesifik. Hindari pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu dan gunakan bentuk tense yang benar (past tense untuk masa kecil). Contoh fokus: "I enjoyed visiting parks because..." atau "As a child, I loved parks because..."

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child because they had big playgrounds and I could play with my friends. For example, we often climbed trees and fed the ducks in the pond.

제안: Kurangi pengisi (uh, um) dan hilangkan pengulangan. Jawab langsung lalu beri alasan singkat dan spesifik dengan linking word (because, so, therefore). Gunakan present tense untuk kebiasaan sekarang. Contoh fokus: "I still enjoy parks because..."

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they help me relax and exercise. For instance, I often go jogging there in the mornings to clear my mind.

제안: Perbaiki kosakata yang salah dan kalimat contoh yang tidak jelas. Gunakan detail spesifik dan relevan; jika memberi contoh, pastikan kata-kata tepat (mis. "children can fly kites", bukan "fly"). Hindari kalimat yang tidak logis. Struktur: topik + alasan + contoh konkret.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks because they provide relaxing outdoor space and promote health. For example, families can walk together, children can play or fly kites, and people can exercise.

제안: Perbaiki pemilihan kata dan ejaan (mis. "fresh air", "take photos of scenery or birds"). Berikan detail konkret dan gunakan linking word untuk menjelaskan rencana (for example, such as). Batasi jawaban sampai 3–4 kalimat yang jelas.

예시: I would like to visit a national park in the future because I enjoy fresh air and nature. For example, I plan to go hiking, take photos of birds and landscapes, and stay there for a couple of days next year.

× Yes, I like going to park as a child because a child like this, like this parks.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks as a child because a child likes playing in parks like these.

The speaker is referring to past habits, so the past tense 'liked' should be used (Present tense issue). Also 'park' should be plural 'parks' to match general reference, and 'a child like this' is unclear; use 'a child likes' for third person singular agreement. Use 'parks like these' for correct plurality and demonstrative form.

× Yes, yes, I still like going to parks now. Uh, because, uh, in parks, uh, because in parks I am child, uh, and child.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks now because when I am in parks I feel like a child.

The sentence repeats and has tense and structure issues (Present tense issue). 'I am child' is missing an article and is unnatural; use 'I feel like a child' to express feeling. Remove redundant fillers and duplicate conjunctions to make a clear present-tense statement.

× Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they are relaxing and they help people stay healthy. For example, families can go for a walk and children can fly and this also makes the Neck home poor.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they are relaxing and help people stay healthy. For example, families can go for a walk and children can play, which also improves neighborhood well-being.

'Children can fly' is incorrect; likely intended 'play' (incorrect verb) and 'this also makes the Neck home poor' is unclear and ungrammatical. Use 'play' (verb choice) and 'improves neighborhood well-being' to convey positive impact. The issue involves incorrect verb usage and sentence meaning (Verb in the present participle form).

× Well, I would like to visit a National Park in the future because I enjoy net fresh air. For example, I want to go hiking and take photo of this Canary and I hope to go next year.

✓ Well, I would like to visit a national park in the future because I enjoy the fresh air. For example, I want to go hiking and take photos of the scenery, and I hope to go next year.

'Net fresh air' is a typo and should be 'the fresh air'. 'take photo of this Canary' is incorrect; likely meant 'take photos of the scenery' or 'of the wildlife'. Use plural 'photos' and correct articles ('the fresh air'). This is a present tense and word-choice issue (Present tense issue).