Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I did.”), then add one or two specific supporting details with proper tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and filler words.

예시: Yes, I did. I often went to the park on weekends when I was a child because my family liked picnics there, and I enjoyed playing on the swings.

제안: Provide a clear, natural topic sentence and explain reasons coherently. Use correct verb forms and linking words (because, but, so). Keep it to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Not really. Now that I'm 16 I prefer more active outdoor activities like cycling or meeting friends, because I find parks a bit quiet and I want something more energetic.

제안: Express your opinion directly, then give a specific reason and an example. Use accurate vocabulary (environment getting worse, greener) and correct grammar. Use linking words like because and for example to make it coherent.

예시: Yes, I would. I think my city needs more parks because pollution and concrete development have reduced green spaces; for example, new parks could improve air quality and provide places for families to relax.

제안: Answer directly and add a specific reason or detail to expand your response. Mention what attracts you to that park and what you hope to do there, using one or two supporting sentences and linking words.

예시: Yes, I'd like to visit the wetland park because I enjoy birdwatching and seeing unique plants; I hope to walk the trails and take photos of the wildlife.

× Sure, I like going to the park in my childhood and when it in in the weekend I often went to the park.

✓ I liked going to the park in my childhood, and on weekends I often went there.

The sentence mixes present tense ('I like') with past-time reference 'in my childhood' and past action 'went'. Use past tense 'liked' to match childhood. Also correct preposition and phrasing: use 'on weekends' not 'in the weekend', and avoid repetition 'it in in'. Replace repeated noun with pronoun 'there' for clarity.

× No, I don't. As you know, I'm a 16 year old boy now and with my with my age and I think I I prefer to go outside. I prefer go outside to stay at.

✓ No, I don't. As you know, I'm a 16-year-old boy now, and because of my age I prefer to go outside rather than stay at home.

Use hyphens in '16-year-old'. The phrase 'with my age' is incorrect; use 'because of my age' or 'at my age'. 'I prefer to go outside' needs the infinitive 'to' and contrast should be 'rather than stay at home'. Remove duplicated words and ensure present tense 'prefer' matches current preference.

× Well it's honestly I'd like to see more parts in my city because the environment of my city is more more and more worse and I hope my city is to be green.

✓ Well, honestly, I'd like to see more parks in my city because the environment is getting worse and I hope my city becomes greener.

Use 'parks' not 'parts'. Remove awkward contraction 'it's honestly' and place 'honestly' as an adverb. Replace 'more more and more worse' with 'getting worse' (double comparative is incorrect). 'I hope my city is to be green' is ungrammatical; use 'I hope my city becomes greener' or 'becomes more green'.

× Well, let me think, uh, in the future I'd like to go to the wetland park.

✓ Well, let me think. In the future I'd like to visit the wetland park.

The original is mostly correct but 'go to the wetland park' is improved to 'visit the wetland park' for natural phrasing. Also replace filler commas with a period for clarity. Maintain future/modal 'I'd like' to express a future desire.