Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 整体表达自然且具体，但句子略长且部分信息重复。建议使用更清晰的主题句并用一两个简短的支持句，避免冗长；可加入少量连接词使逻辑更流畅。另一方面，可用更丰富的词汇替换常见词如 “a lot”/“play games”。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went there with friends because the wide open spaces let us run and play football. Sometimes we'd have picnics under the trees or take turns on the swings, which made those afternoons feel carefree.

제안: 回答清晰并直接回应问题，信息具体且贴合日常生活。建议用一两个连接词增强连贯性，并可加入简单对比词汇（e.g. however）或时间副词使表达更精确。避免重复“go”与“visit”。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, especially after a long day at work. I usually lack energy on weekdays, but on weekends I take walks there to relax and get fresh air, which helps me recharge for the week ahead.

제안: 观点明确且理由充分，但存在小错误（如“works”应为“walks”）和冗余短语（“for example”与列举重复）。建议纠正词汇错误，简化列举并加入连接词如 “for instance” 或“moreover”以增强条理。

예시: Yes, absolutely. If the city had more parks, I would have more places to relax and exercise, for instance going for walks, having picnics or jogging. Moreover, different parks would offer varied scenery and atmospheres, which I would really appreciate.

제안: 回答包含具体目标公园和理由，但存在词汇使用错误（“work around the lake”应为“walk around the lake”）且句子有点冗长。建议用一两句更简洁地表达计划，修正词汇并增加一点个人感受或期待细节。

예시: Yes, I plan to visit Zhongshan Park in Shenzhen when I have some free time. I’ve heard it has beautiful gardens and traditional buildings, and I’m looking forward to walking around the lake and taking photos of the scenery.

× Yes, I still enjoy going to parks after working all day.

✓ Yes, I still enjoy going to parks after working all day.

该句本身语法正确。“enjoy”后接动名词“going”是正确用法，无需修改。保持原句即可。

× I usually don't have the energy to visit on weekdays, but on weekends I like to go for a walk in the park to relax and get some fresh air.

✓ I usually don't have the energy to visit them on weekdays, but on weekends I like to go for a walk in the park to relax and get some fresh air.

需要明确指代对象。原句中“visit”后缺少宾语，听者可能不清楚是“visit parks”。建议加上代词“them”或直接改为“visit parks”。这属于代词/句子结构问题（此处归类为现在时语态问题中需要补全宾语）。中文建议：在“visit”后加上宾语，比如“them”或改为“visit parks”。

× If my city had more parks I would have more options for relaxing and exercising, such as going for works, having picnics, or jogging for example.

✓ If my city had more parks, I would have more options for relaxing and exercising, such as going for walks, having picnics, or jogging, for example.

错误在于“works”拼写和用法错误，应为“walks”（散步）。此外在长句中应在从句与主句之间加逗号以保持清晰。中文建议：把“works”改为“walks”，并在“parks”后加逗号，最后的“for example”位置用逗号分隔。

× Different parks offer different scenery and atmospheres, so I would enjoy a variety of experience.

✓ Different parks offer different scenery and atmospheres, so I would enjoy a variety of experiences.

名词“experience”在此处应使用复数“experiences”，因为前面说的是多种不同的体验。将其改为复数以与“a variety of”搭配。中文建议：把“experience”改为复数“experiences”。

× Yes, there is a park called Zhongshan Park in Shenzhen. I plan to visit it when I have free time because I have heard a lot about its beautiful gardens and traditional buildings, and I would like to work around the lake and take some photos.

✓ Yes, there is a park called Zhongshan Park in Shenzhen. I plan to visit it when I have free time because I have heard a lot about its beautiful gardens and traditional buildings, and I would like to walk around the lake and take some photos.

动词“work around the lake”用法不当，应为“walk around the lake”（在湖边散步）。这是动词选择错误，影响句意。中文建议：把“work”改为“walk”，确保动词与意图相符。