Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and consistent with tense. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid filler words (uh, umm) and correct grammar (use past tense for childhood). Use linking words like 'and' or 'but' correctly.

예시: Yes. I loved going to parks as a child. I used to go every week with my family, and we often had picnics on the grass and played games. However, as I grew older I had less free time to visit them.

제안: Use correct tense and clear structure: state whether you still like parks, then give a reason. Eliminate repetition and correct grammar (use present simple for habits). Use a linking word like 'but' to contrast.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but I don't visit them often because I have to study a lot these days. When I do go, I like to relax and read for a short time.

제안: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons. Avoid repetition and use appropriate adjectives and linking words (for example 'because' or 'so'). Use correct sentence structure and noun-verb agreement.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and give people places to relax and exercise. New parks could include playgrounds and walking paths, which would benefit families and elderly residents.

제안: This answer is clear and relevant but check grammar (use 'has great hiking trails' not 'a great hiking trails') and avoid filler phrases like 'For example, I hope to go.' Add one specific detail about when or with whom to make it more vivid.

예시: Yes, I want to visit the National Park near the mountains because it looks peaceful and has great hiking trails. I hope to go next autumn with a friend for a two-day hike to enjoy the scenery and get good exercise.

× Yes, I like to go into the park, uh, when I'm child.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child.

The sentence refers to past habitual action, so past tense should be used ('liked', 'was'). Also use 'going to the park' (natural collocation) and omit 'into' before 'the park'. Use article 'a' before 'child' is incorrect; 'a child' replaced by 'a child' but here 'when I was a child' is the correct fixed phrase.

× When I'm child, I'm going to the park every week with my family and umm, no, I'm going to the park sometimes because I have not enough times to go to the park.

✓ When I was a child, I went to the park every week with my family, but now I go to the park only sometimes because I don't have enough time.

Mixed tenses and incorrect verb forms: use past simple ('was', 'went') for past routine. For the present situation use present simple ('go') and negative form 'do not have enough time'. 'Times' should be singular 'time' after 'enough'. 'No' and filler words removed for clarity.

× Yes, I enjoyed going parks these days, but I have not enough time to go to the park because because I'm I must study no and.

✓ Yes, I enjoy going to parks these days, but I don't have enough time to go because I must study.

'These days' refers to present, so use present simple 'enjoy' not past 'enjoyed'. Add preposition 'to' after 'going'. 'Have not enough time' is incorrect word order; use 'don't have enough time'. Remove repeated words and unclear fillers; 'I must study' suffices.

× Actually, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. In my city has a more a lot of parks, has a lot of parks, which beautiful, enjoying and good.

✓ Actually, yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. My city has a lot of parks which are beautiful, enjoyable, and good.

Original sentences have incorrect word order and unnecessary repetition. Use 'My city has' as subject-verb structure. 'A lot of parks' is correct without extra articles. Use relative clause 'which are' and correct adjectives: 'enjoying' is wrong here; use 'enjoyable'. List adjectives in normal order and separate with commas.

× Yes, I would like to go to the National Park near the mountains. It looks very peaceful and has a great hiking trails and I think it would be relaxing and good exercise. For example, I hope to go.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to the national park near the mountains. It looks very peaceful and has great hiking trails, and I think it would be relaxing and good exercise. For example, I hope to go there.

Minor errors: 'National Park' need not be capitalized unless a proper name; 'a great hiking trails' mixes singular article with plural noun—use 'great hiking trails' or 'a great hiking trail'. Add comma before 'and' joining clauses. Add 'there' after 'go' to complete the verb phrase 'go there'.