Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: حاول تصحيح الأخطاء النحوية واستخدام جمل واضحة ومترابطة. ركز على استخدام الزمن الماضي الصحيح (I used to / I would), تصريف الأفعال وتجنب كلمات غير مناسبة (want -> went, theirs -> there). أيضاً ضَمّ جملة موضوعية قصيرة ثم زيادة تفصيل واحد أو اثنين باستخدام روابط بسيطة مثل 'because' أو 'with'.

예시: Yes, I did. I used to go to the park behind my house every weekend because it was close and safe. I often went there with my friends, and we played football or rode our bikes together.

제안: صحح بناء الجملة والأخطاء في استخدام الحروف والأزمنة (prefer to stay at home / spend time indoors). اجعل الجواب أقصر وواضحاً واذكر سبباً محدداً واحداً مع رابط (because / so). تجنّب كلمات غير ملائمة وعبارات غير مكتملة.

예시: I don't go to parks much now because most people in my hometown prefer to stay at home and spend time indoors. As a result, the parks are usually quiet and mainly used by children to play.

제안: اجعل الإجابة منظمة ومنطقية: ابدأ بجملة مباشرة (Yes, I would.) ثم اذكر سبباً محدداً واحداً أو اثنين بوضوح (for recreation, health, environment). استخدم مفردات مناسبة (parks, safe, facilities, playgrounds) وابتعد عن جمل غير مفهومة. استخدم روابط مثل 'because' و 'so' لربط الأفكار.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide space for exercise and relaxation. New parks with good playgrounds and safety features would encourage families to spend more time outdoors.

제안: صحح التراكيب البسيطة (I want to go to the park in Dubai / it is safe and well maintained). ابدأ بجملة موضوعية ثم أعطِ سبباً واحداً أو اثنين مع استخدام ربط بسيط. حسّن الاستعمالات (comfortable, relax, play) واحرص على عدم تكرار الكلمات.

예시: I would like to visit parks in Dubai because they are safe and well maintained. I enjoy parks where my family and I can relax, have a picnic, and let the children play in clean playgrounds.

× Yes I did, I usually want to the park because it is behind my home and I often want theirs with my friend at the weekend.

✓ Yes, I did. I usually went to the park because it was behind my home and I often went there with my friend at the weekend.

The student is describing past habits, so past tense verbs are required. 'Want' is present; change to 'went'. 'Is' should be 'was' for past description. 'Want theirs' is incorrect — the intended word is 'there'. Use past simple for repeated past actions: 'usually went' and 'often went there'. Also add punctuation and correct word choice for clarity.

× I don't go to the park much now because most of the people in the my hometown prefer stay at the home and spending the time indoor.

✓ I don't go to the park much now because most of the people in my hometown prefer to stay at home and spend their time indoors.

After 'prefer' use the infinitive 'to stay' or gerund consistently; here 'prefer to stay' is natural. Remove extra article 'the' before 'my hometown'. Use 'at home' (not 'the home') and 'spend' (base form) not 'spending' to match the parallel structure. 'Indoors' is the correct adverb form. Also change 'the people' to 'people' or keep 'the' based on context; 'most people' is typical.

× As the result, the park are often for the IT is for the children to set to like to play.

✓ As a result, the park is often used by children to play.

Subject 'park' is singular so the verb should be 'is' not 'are'. The original sentence has many extraneous and incorrect words; 'used by children to play' expresses the intended meaning concisely. 'As a result' is the correct phrase. Remove unclear fragments like 'for the IT' and 'set to like'.

× Yes, I would like to say more parts in my city because it is it quickly raining the down and money.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because it rains heavily and they need funding.

The intended modal 'would like to see' (desire) should be used instead of 'say'. 'Parts' should be 'parks'. 'It is it quickly raining the down and money' is ungrammatical; interpret as 'it rains heavily' and 'they need money/funding'. Use clear verbs and noun forms.

× It is funniest do not work.

✓ The facilities are often broken or not working.

Original fragment 'It is funniest do not work' is incoherent. Recast as a clear sentence describing condition: 'The facilities are often broken or not working.' Choose appropriate nouns ('facilities') and adjectives/verbs for clarity.

× They need reply and the better material and players to change anything and removed in the park safety.

✓ They need repairs and better materials and equipment to improve safety in the park.

Pronouns and nouns are misused: 'reply' should be 'repairs'; 'players' likely meant 'play equipment' or 'equipment'; 'removed in the park safety' should be 'improve safety in the park'. Reorder words for natural English and use correct nouns.

× I want to go the park in the Dubai because it is safety and well maintained.

✓ I want to go to the park in Dubai because it is safe and well maintained.

Use preposition 'to' after 'go'. Do not use 'the' before city names like 'Dubai' unless specific (e.g., 'the Dubai Mall'). 'Safety' is a noun; use adjective 'safe'. 'Well maintained' is correct.

× I like the parks where I can to play and relax with my family and they are feeling more comfortable.

✓ I like parks where I can play and relax with my family and feel more comfortable.

After 'can' use base verb form 'play' not 'to play'. Remove 'the' before 'parks' for general statement. 'They are feeling more comfortable' is awkward; instead use 'feel more comfortable' referring to 'I' or 'we'. Maintain subject consistency.