Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise, correct grammar and give clear, specific details. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g. Yes, I loved going to parks as a child), correct tense and prepositions, and add one or two specific memories or activities to enrich the answer. Avoid unclear phrases ("in the 19") and redundant words.

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park when I was a child because there was one right next to our house. We went almost every day to play on the swings and feed the ducks in the pond, which I remember as my favorite activity.

제안: Give a direct answer and correct pronunciation/word choice ("parks" and "no longer"). Use one linking phrase to explain reasons and a specific example of current behavior. Keep it within 3–4 sentences and avoid repetition.

예시: Not really; I don't visit parks often now because I prefer indoor activities. However, I usually go once or twice a year for a family picnic, when we bring food, play simple games and relax together.

제안: Answer directly and support with clear reasons and examples. Correct grammar ("If there were many parks...") and avoid filler words. Mention specific factors (maintenance, crowding, convenience) to make the argument convincing.

예시: No, I think one large well-maintained park is enough for our small city because multiple small parks could be harder to maintain and might be underused. A single central park is easier to keep clean and attracts more visitors.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and add specific reasons and details about what you want to do there. Use linking words (for example, because, such as) and correct word order ("a park that is far away, such as Dubai Safari Park"). Keep it natural and avoid simple repetition.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Dubai Safari Park in the future because it is the largest park in Dubai and offers many attractions. For example, I want to see the animal exhibits, take a guided safari tour, and try some of the interactive activities like feeding sessions.

× Yes, as a child I would like to go on to the park because we have a nearby park to our house, so we are always going there in the 19.

✓ Yes, as a child I liked going to the park because we had a park near our house, so we always went there in the evenings.

The sentence mixes present tense with past-time reference. 'As a child' requires past tense (liked, had, went). 'Would like to go on to the park' is unnatural for a habitual past activity; use 'liked going to the park' or 'would go to the park'. 'We have a nearby park to our house' is wrong preposition and tense; use 'we had a park near our house'. 'We are always going there in the 19' is unclear and tense-mismatched; likely intended 'we always went there in the evenings' or another time period. Suggestion: keep past tense consistently for childhood descriptions and use natural collocations (have/had near, go/went to a park).

× No, not really, because I'm old now, so barks is not longer interesting to me. Interesting to me. I think maybe once a year I will go to the park, maybe with my family to to go on a picnic, but not like always.

✓ No, not really, because I'm older now, so parks are no longer interesting to me. I think maybe once a year I will go to a park, maybe with my family for a picnic, but not often.

Several issues: 'I'm old now' is acceptable but 'older now' is more natural when comparing past and present. 'barks' is a misspelling of 'parks' and 'is not longer' is incorrect word order and tense; correct form is 'are no longer' (present tense plural agreement). 'Interesting to me.' is a sentence fragment; combine smoothly. 'to to go on a picnic' has duplicated 'to' and awkward preposition; use 'for a picnic'. 'but not like always' is informal/ungrammatical; use 'but not often'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with plural nouns ('parks are'), correct word order ('no longer'), fix duplicates and use natural adverb phrases.

× If there is so many parks in in my city, that will be too much. We need, uh, another.

✓ If there are too many parks in my city, that would be too much. We do not need another.

Errors include subject-verb agreement and article/word choice. 'If there is so many parks' should be 'If there are too many parks' (plural subject requires 'are' and 'too many' is the correct quantifier). 'in in' is repeated. 'that will be too much' is grammatically possible but 'would be' is more conditional and natural in this hypothetical. 'We need, uh, another.' is incomplete and unclear; better: 'We do not need another.' Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs, remove repetitions, and complete the idea.

× No, my city is very small, so one park, one big park is enough for me.

✓ No, my city is very small, so one park, one big park, is enough for me.

The original is mostly correct but punctuation helps clarity; 'one park, one big park is enough' treats 'one park, one big park' as a single unit, so verb 'is' is fine. The issue flagged is singular/plural ambiguity; ensure verb agrees with intended subject. Suggestion: add commas for clarity or rephrase 'one big park is enough for me.'

× Yes, I want to go to this far is Dubai Safari Park. It is the largest park in Dubai and it has many different animals, many different activities to do and it's very interesting to me.

✓ Yes, I want to go to the Dubai Safari Park. It is the largest park in Dubai and it has many different animals and activities, and it's very interesting to me.

'I want to go to this far is Dubai Safari Park' is ungrammatical; likely intended 'I want to go to the Dubai Safari Park' or 'The farthest park I want to visit is Dubai Safari Park.' Use present simple for desires. Combine list items with proper conjunctions and remove redundancy 'many different activities to do' -> 'many activities'. Suggestion: use a clear noun phrase for the park and simplify the list for natural speech.