Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: حاول أن تضيف جملة موضوع واضحة وتصحح الأخطاء النحوية وتستخدم تفاصيل محددة ومرتبة باستخدام روابط منطقية. مثلاً استخدم زمن الماضي بشكل صحيح، ووضح لماذا كانت الحدائق ممتعة (الألعاب، الطبيعة، الأصدقاء) وتجنب الكلمات غير المناسبة مثل "avoid fitness apart". اجعل إجابتك قصيرة (1-4 جمل) ومترابطة.

예시: Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child because they were fun and full of games. For example, I used to play on the swings and run around with my friends. These activities kept me active and happy.

제안: صحح الأخطاء النحوية واضبط الزمن واستخدم رابطًا لتوضيح السبب. بدلاً من إجابة قصيرة ومبهمة، قدم رأيًا واضحًا مع سبب محدد وأمثلة قصيرة. تجنب تعابير غير صحيحة مثل "I think it was bored"؛ استخدم "I find them boring" أو "I don't enjoy them as much".

예시: Not really. I don't enjoy going to parks as much now because I prefer indoor activities like going to the gym or meeting friends at cafés. Sometimes I visit parks for a walk, but I find them less exciting than before.

제안: اجعل جملتك الأولى واضحة ثم ادعمها بتفاصيل محددة مرتبطة بالأسباب والفوائد. استخدم روابط مثل "because" و"for example" واهتم بالقواعد مثل توافق الفعل والفاعل (it makes → they make). حاول أن تكون أكثر تحديدًا في الفوائد (الصحة، الأماكن الترفيهية، المساحات الخضراء).

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide space for exercise and relaxation. For example, new parks could offer playgrounds for children and walking paths for adults, which would improve public health and make the city more attractive.

제안: استخدم زمنًا صحيحًا وصياغة أكثر طبيعية. إذا زرت كل المنتزهات المحلية، اشرح ذلك بوضوح وقدّم احتمالًا للمستقبل (مثل زيارة متنزه جديد أو حديقة وطنية). اربط الجمل باستخدام "because" أو "so" لتكون مترابطة.

예시: Not really. I have already visited the parks around my city, so I don't have any specific park in mind at the moment. However, I might visit a national park or a famous garden if I travel in the future.

× Yes, I like going to the park when I'm child because it's funny and help me avoid fitness apart maybe being fat.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child because it was fun and helped me stay fit and avoid being overweight.

The sentence has several pronoun and verb form errors: 'I'm child' should be 'I was a child' (incorrect pronoun and tense), 'it's funny' should be 'it was fun' to match past tense, and 'help me avoid fitness apart maybe being fat' is ungrammatical. Use 'helped me stay fit and avoid being overweight' for clarity and correct collocation. Suggestions: use correct subject pronoun forms, match tense consistently, and use appropriate collocations ('stay fit', 'avoid being overweight').

× No, I don't think that because I am young and I think it was bored.

✓ No, I don't think so because I am young and I think it would be boring.

'I don't think that' is awkward; 'so' is more natural. 'I think it was bored' is incorrect: 'was bored' makes the park the subject experiencing boredom (wrong); use 'boring' to describe the park. Also tense/modal needed: since speaker is talking about present preference, 'would be boring' or 'is boring' depending on meaning. Suggestion: use correct adjective form 'boring' to describe something and choose proper tense/modal for hypothetical or general statements.

× Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city because it makes activity in my city and helps the children to uh play and have fun and it make the city beautiful.

✓ Yes, I'd like to see more parks in my city because they would create more activities, help children play and have fun, and make the city more beautiful.

Multiple issues: 'it makes activity in my city' is incorrect subject agreement and collocation; use plural 'they' to refer to 'parks' and 'create activities'. 'helps the children to uh play' - remove filler and use 'help children play'. 'it make' is subject-verb agreement error; should be 'make'. Suggestions: ensure subject-verb agreement (parks -> they/make), use correct verb forms ('create activities', 'help children play'), and avoid fillers.

× No, I don't have any parks to go in the future. I have already go to the parks around my city.

✓ No, I don't have any specific parks I want to go to in the future. I have already gone to the parks around my city.

'to go in the future' is awkward; say 'I want to go to in the future' for clarity. 'I have already go' is incorrect past participle; should be 'have already gone'. Suggestions: use correct perfect tense ('have gone') and clearer phrasing for future intentions ('parks I want to go to in the future').