Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No and brief reason), then add one specific supporting detail. Use correct verb tenses and reduce repetition. For example, say when you went, what you did, and one reason why it was enjoyable or healthy.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I used to visit every weekend to play football and climb trees, which kept me active and fit. My father often encouraged me to go because he believed fresh air and exercise were good for my health.

제안: Answer directly and use natural phrases. Correct word choice and avoid filler repetition. Provide one or two specific reasons and use linking words (for example, because, and).

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often go to relax and enjoy the green spaces because walking among trees helps me de-stress and stay healthy.

제안: Give a clear opinion with concise reasons and correct grammar. Avoid uncertain verb forms; use simple future or present continuous correctly. Mention one concrete benefit of having more parks.

예시: Definitely. I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe spaces for families and improve air quality. I’m glad the horticulture department is planning new parks in Lahore, which will give people more places to exercise and relax.

제안: Be specific about one or two parks and explain why you want to visit them using clear vocabulary. Avoid vague phrases and repetition. Use linking words to give reasons or comparisons.

예시: Yes. I would love to visit Central Park in New York because it has large walking paths, interesting sculptures, and diverse scenery. I’m also interested in visiting local botanical gardens to see native plants and learn about landscaping.

× Yeah, when I am, when I was little, I fond of parks and I go parks to go and walk over there and do extracurricular activities because these activities make me healthy.

✓ Yeah, when I was little, I was fond of parks and I went to parks to walk and do extracurricular activities because those activities made me healthy.

Errors: incorrect tense and verb forms ('am' with 'was little', 'fond' missing verb 'was', 'go parks' incorrect verb and preposition). Use past tense consistently for childhood: 'was little', 'was fond', 'went to parks', 'walk' -> 'walked', 'these activities' -> 'those activities' to match past context. Suggestion: consistently use past tense for past habits and include correct verbs and prepositions (go to, be fond of).

× In that time, my father tell me told me that you are healthy as best because on that time I am going to the park.

✓ At that time my father told me that I was very healthy because I used to go to the park.

Errors: tense inconsistency and incorrect verb forms ('tell me told me', 'you are healthy as best', 'on that time I am going to the park'). Use past simple for reported speech: 'told me'. Change 'you are healthy as best' to natural expression 'I was very healthy'. 'I used to go to the park' or 'I went to the park' suits habitual past. Also use 'at that time' rather than 'on that time'.

× Yeah, I am keenly going for parks and I often need going parks nowadays just because the to view the green greens, to view the green grass and the trees and also the the the walk make me healthy and beneficial.

✓ Yes, I like going to parks and I often go to parks nowadays to see the green grass and trees; walking there also makes me healthy and is beneficial.

Errors: incorrect progressive and modal verbs ('am keenly going for parks', 'need going parks'), extra words ('the to view the green greens'), subject-verb agreement ('walk make me'). Use simple present for habits: 'I like going', 'I often go to parks'. Use 'see' not 'view the green greens'. Correct agreement: 'walking ... makes me healthy and is beneficial'. Remove filler words and repetitions. Suggestion: use simple present for repeated actions and ensure subject-verb agreement and correct prepositions ('go to parks').

× Yeah, I definitely would because parks in our country are as limited.

✓ Yes, I definitely would because parks in our country are limited.

Errors: unnecessary word 'as' causing ungrammatical comparison. Use 'are limited' to state scarcity. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary comparative words unless completing a comparison (e.g., 'as limited as').

× But nowadays the government going to be subsidized, the horticulture department and they, they, they are going to build lots of parks in, in if I'm talk about my native city, Lahore, yeah, there are lots of parks that I'm going to visit in future.

✓ But recently the government and the horticulture department are going to subsidize projects and build many parks. If I talk about my native city Lahore, there will be many parks that I will visit in the future.

Errors: incorrect future construction and word order ('the government going to be subsidized' misuses passive), repetitions, tense inconsistency. Use active future: 'are going to subsidize' or 'will subsidize', 'are going to build' for future plans. For visiting in the future use 'I will visit' or 'I am going to visit'. Suggestion: use clear active forms for future actions and avoid redundancy.

× Yeah, there are lots of parks around us in our country, around the city, around the country as well, international, internationally.

✓ Yes, there are many parks around our city and across the country, and even internationally.

Errors: repetitive phrases and incorrect adverb/adjective choice ('international, internationally'). Use 'many' instead of 'lots of' for formality, remove redundancy, and use 'internationally' correctly to indicate worldwide presence. Suggestion: streamline lists and use correct adverb/adjective forms.

× But I fondly fond of the the American park that are Central Park over there because it has a great park to walk and see the different type of.

✓ But I am fond of the American park, Central Park, because it is a great place to walk and see different types of trees and scenery.

Errors: missing verb 'am' ('I fondly fond of'), subject-verb agreement ('park that are Central Park'), article repetition and sentence fragment ('different type of'). Use 'I am fond of', correct agreement 'Central Park is', and complete the object 'different types of trees and scenery'. Suggestion: include the verb 'be' after 'I' when using adjectives, ensure subject and verb agree, and finish noun phrases (e.g., 'different types of ...').