Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more grammatically accurate and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid fillers ('uh') and repeat words. Use past tense consistently and correct verb forms.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My dad often took my brother and me to a nearby park, and my mother would pack bento boxes for our picnics, so we spent whole afternoons playing and eating together.

제안: Give a clear direct answer, then provide two specific, well-linked reasons. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition. Use linking words (because, so, and) and correct collocations (e.g., 'parks are busy', 'I enjoy nature').

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because I love being in nature and getting fresh air. For example, I like jogging in the morning where I can feel the sun and watch other people exercising, which motivates me to be active.

제안: Answer directly and explain briefly with specific comparison. Avoid repeated words and improve sentence flow by using linking words like 'because' and 'however'. Use correct article usage and plural/singular forms.

예시: Not particularly, because I live in the city center where there are mostly buildings and only a few trees. I really miss the larger green parks from my hometown, which had playgrounds and lots of open space.

제안: Respond with a clear statement of interest, then give specific reasons using accurate vocabulary. Avoid vague or repeated phrases and incorrect word order. Mention one or two concrete features you want to see.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit Central Park in New York someday because it is very large and has varied landscapes like lakes, meadows and tree-lined paths. I want to walk around the park, see the wildlife and relax in a green space amid the city.

× my dad usually bring me and my brother to park

✓ my dad usually brings my brother and me to the park

The subject 'my dad' is third person singular, so the verb needs an -s: 'brings'. Also 'me and my brother' should be 'my brother and me' for natural word order, and 'to park' needs the article 'the' before 'park'. Suggestion: Use 'brings' for he/she/it subjects and include the definite article when referring to a specific place (the park).

× and my mom used to take some Bento for us

✓ and my mom used to bring some bento for us

The main issue is lexical: in this context 'take' is less natural than 'bring' because the action is toward the park (speaker's location). 'Bento' is a common noun and should be lowercase. The sentence structure is otherwise acceptable. Suggestion: Use 'bring' when indicating carrying something to the location where the speaker and others will be, and write common nouns in lowercase unless proper nouns.

× The park is always brought road and many people in there

✓ The park is always crowded with people and there are many people there

'brought road' seems to be an incorrect attempt at 'crowded'. Use 'crowded' (adjective) with 'with people'. Also the clause 'many people in there' is ungrammatical; use 'there are many people there' or 'many people are there'. Suggestion: Use 'crowded with people' to describe a place full of people and use 'there are' to state existence of many people.

× I really like nature by the way, the sun, sun is good and I can run in the park also I can, I can do activity

✓ I really like nature, by the way: the sun is nice, and I can run in the park; I can also do activities

Problems include punctuation and word choice. 'Sun, sun is good' is repetitive; use 'the sun is nice'. 'Do activity' is incorrect—use plural 'do activities' or 'do an activity'. Also place 'also' before the verb or after auxiliary: 'I can also do activities'. Suggestion: Use natural collocations ('the sun is nice'), pluralize countable nouns ('activities'), and place 'also' near the verb.

× Not actually because I'm living in the middle middle of the city so there is no nature, just buildings and few trees but not enough.

✓ Not really, because I live in the middle of the city, so there is no nature—just buildings and a few trees, which are not enough

Use 'Not really' rather than 'Not actually'. 'I'm living' suggests continuous action; 'I live' is more natural for residence. 'middle middle' is repetition. 'Few trees' should be 'a few trees' when meaning a small number (not zero). Add a clearer clause for 'not enough'. Suggestion: Use 'I live' for permanent situations, avoid repeated words, and use 'a few' to indicate a small number.

× So I really I really missed my hometown's park

✓ So I really miss my hometown park

Tense and redundancy: 'missed' (past) conflicts with current feeling; present 'miss' is better. Also 'my hometown's park' is acceptable but 'my hometown park' is more natural. Remove repeated 'I really'. Suggestion: Keep tense consistent with current feelings and avoid repetition.

× There is not many parks what I know so, but I know the Central Park in New York

✓ There are not many parks, as far as I know, but I know Central Park in New York

'There is' should be 'There are' because 'parks' is plural (subject-verb agreement). 'what I know' is awkward; use 'as far as I know'. 'the Central Park' should be 'Central Park' (no definite article for proper name). Suggestion: Use 'there are' with plural nouns, and 'as far as I know' for expressing limited knowledge; drop 'the' before most park names.

× I heard that there is that the park is real big and Willy Willy na natural really good nature has the really good nature.

✓ I heard that the park is really big and very natural; it has really good nature

Multiple problems: 'real big' should be 'really big' (use adverb 'really' to modify adjective). Phrase 'Willy Willy na' is unclear and likely gibberish—replace with 'very'. 'natural really good nature has the really good nature' is wordy and ungrammatical; simplify to 'very natural; it has beautiful nature' or 'it has good natural scenery'. Suggestion: Use adverbs correctly ('really big'), choose clear intensifiers ('very'), and prefer concise phrasing like 'it has beautiful natural scenery'.

× So someday I want to go Central Park

✓ So someday I want to go to Central Park

Missing preposition 'to' after 'go' when indicating destination: 'go to Central Park'. Suggestion: Use 'go to' before place names (except when using 'visit' or similar verbs).