Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the answer more grammatical, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence (Yes, I loved going to parks as a child), then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (for example, because/so). Avoid repetition and long run-on sentences. Correct verb forms and use past tense consistently.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, there was a small park near our house where my parents took me on weekends, and I often met other children there, so I made many friends and had a lot of fun.

제안: Give a direct topic sentence and a clear reason; use correct tense and concise phrasing. Use linking words (but, because, so) to connect ideas and provide one specific detail (time, place, activity). Avoid unclear fragments.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks, but now I usually go for jogging rather than playing with children because there is a nice park near my house with a good running path.

제안: Answer directly and give two clear, specific reasons using linking words (because, so, for example). Avoid vague or fragmented sentences and emotional exclamations. Provide concrete benefits (exercise, community events) and one brief example.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because they provide places for people to exercise and relax. For example, parks encourage social interaction and community events, so neighbors can meet and get to know each other.

제안: Be specific about the park and explain why you want to visit using complete sentences. Start with a clear topic sentence naming the park, then add reasons or feelings using linking words (because, so, to). Avoid filler words and unfinished thoughts.

예시: Yes, there is a park I would like to visit called 'The People’s Park' in Denmark. I want to go there someday because I have heard it is beautifully designed and peaceful, so I can relax and experience a different culture.

× Yes, I love to when I was a child there is a near park in our area, so we went there with my parents and I have so much fun because I have get my friends I have I can encounter many kids and becoming friends with them and.

✓ Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. There was a park near our area, so we went there with my parents and I had so much fun because I met my friends, I could meet many kids and become friends with them.

This sentence contains multiple sentence structure and tense problems. 'I love to when I was a child' mixes present and past tense; change to past 'I loved going to parks when I was a child.' 'There is a near park' should be past 'There was a park near our area' to match past time. 'I have so much fun' should be past 'I had so much fun.' 'I have get my friends' is ungrammatical; use past simple 'I met my friends.' 'I can encounter many kids and becoming friends with them' mixes modal and -ing forms incorrectly; use past ability 'I could meet many kids and become friends with them.' Suggestion: break into shorter sentences, keep consistent past tense, use simple past verbs for completed past actions and use correct verb forms after modals.

× Yeah, I love to go still in the park, but not to play with the other kids, but the jogging around because the part that near in our house is there A and there's a good.

✓ Yes, I still like going to the park, but not to play with other kids; I go for jogging because there is a park near our house and it is good.

Problems: 'I love to go still in the park' has awkward order and tense; use 'I still like going to the park.' 'not to play with the other kids, but the jogging around' is incorrect: use 'but to jog' or 'I go for jogging.' 'the part that near in our house is there A and there's a good' is ungrammatical; correct to 'there is a park near our house and it is good.' Keep present simple for habitual actions and correct word order.

× Yeah, I like to see more parks in our city. It was good for the people to meet one another, to connect one another, to talk one another. Because when you go to the park, people can. You can see people doing. Oh my God.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in our city. They are good places for people to meet each other, to connect, and to talk. When you go to the park, you can see people socializing.

Issues: 'Yeah, I like to see more parks' is acceptable but 'would like' is more natural for a request/wish. 'It was good for the people' uses past tense and awkward phrasing; use present 'They are good places for people to meet each other.' 'to talk one another' is incorrect collocation; use 'to talk' or 'to talk to one another.' Fragment sentences 'people can. You can see people doing.' are incomplete; combine into a complete sentence 'When you go to the park, you can see people socializing.' Keep consistent tense and avoid sentence fragments.

× And there's a park named called, uh, parts of the people and it's from the country Denmark. And I want really to go there someday and to feel and to.

✓ There is a park called 'Parts of the People' in Denmark, and I really want to go there someday to experience it.

Problems: 'named called' is redundant; use either 'named' or 'called.' 'parts of the people' may be a proper name and should be capitalized and quoted. 'it's from the country Denmark' is awkward; use 'in Denmark.' 'I want really to go there someday and to feel and to' is incomplete and has incorrect adverb placement; use 'I really want to go there someday to experience it.' Suggest using complete clauses and correct word order.