Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, grammatical and concise. Begin with a direct statement (topic sentence) about your childhood habit, then add one or two specific supporting details using correct tense and linking words. Avoid unnecessary words and pronunciation errors (e.g., 'when I was shy' is odd here).

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. I used to go with my family two or three times a week because I liked playing sports there, especially walking and badminton with my friends.

제안: Answer directly, keep verb tenses consistent, and give a clear reason with a specific effect. Use linking words like 'because' and correct verbs (e.g., 'helps me relax' not 'help me relax'). Replace vague phrase 'reduce days' with a clear benefit (reduce stress or clear your mind).

예시: Definitely. I still enjoy going to parks, especially at the weekend, because I go walking and running with a friend. It really helps me relax and reduce stress after a busy week.

제안: Give a full reason—start with a direct yes/no then explain why with a specific, relevant benefit. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and complete your sentence. Use linking words such as 'because' and include an example or consequence.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they provide green space for exercise and family activities. For example, having more small parks near apartments would make it easier for people to take daily walks.

제안: Respond with a clear topic sentence naming the park or its location, then give specific plans or timing. Correct grammar (e.g., 'the park I want to visit is a 20-minute walk from my apartment'). Avoid fillers and be concise (max ~5 sentences).

예시: Yes. The park I want to visit is about a 20-minute walk from my apartment. My friends and I are planning to go there next month to explore the trails and have a picnic.

× When I was a shy, I like going to the park with my family.

✓ When I was shy, I liked going to the park with my family.

The phrase 'a shy' incorrectly uses an article with an adjective. Also tense should be past ('liked') to match 'When I was shy' referring to childhood. Remove 'a' before 'shy' and use past tense verb 'liked'. Suggestion: use adjectives without 'a' and keep consistent past tense for past time references.

× I often win two or three time a week because I enjoy playing sport there, such as learning walking or playing badminton with my friend.

✓ I often went two or three times a week because I enjoyed playing sports there, such as walking or playing badminton with my friends.

Several errors: 'win' is wrong verb; 'went' fits past habit. 'time' should be plural 'times'. 'playing sport' should be plural 'playing sports'. 'learning walking' is incorrect; use 'walking'. 'friend' should be plural if general, or keep singular but be consistent. Use past tense 'went/enjoyed' to match childhood context.

× Definitely, I still like going to the park now because I like to go walking and running with my friend, especially on the weekend.

✓ Definitely, I still like going to the park now because I like to go walking and running with my friends, especially on the weekends.

Minor number and pluralization: 'friend' -> 'friends' if referring generally. 'on the weekend' is acceptable in some dialects but 'on the weekends' or 'at the weekend' is more natural for habitual activities. Keep present tense 'like' consistent.

× It help me relax and reduce days.

✓ It helps me relax and make my days less stressful.

Subject-verb agreement: 'It' requires 'helps' (third person singular). 'reduce days' is unclear; use a clearer expression such as 'make my days less stressful' or 'reduce my stress'. Ensure verb agrees with subject and meaning is clear.

× Yes, I would like to see more park in my city because uh.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because...

'more park' is incorrect; plural 'parks' is needed when referring to additional countable items. Also the sentence ends with 'uh' which is filler; replace with a reason. Use plural for countable nouns when generalizing.

× Yes, I have park which I want to go to in the future is uh take a turn by 20 minute from my apartment.

✓ Yes, there is a park I want to go to in the future; it is a 20-minute walk from my apartment.

Original sentence has faulty structure and articles: 'I have park which I want to go to' is awkward. Use 'there is a park I want to go to'. 'take a turn by 20 minute' is incorrect—use 'a 20-minute walk' or '20 minutes by bus/car'. Ensure proper article 'a' and plural/time expression '20-minute'.

× We plan to go there with my friend maybe next month.

✓ We plan to go there with my friends, maybe next month.

Tense 'plan to go' is fine for future intention. Adjust number agreement: 'my friend' -> 'my friends' if more than one; if singular, keep 'my friend'. Add comma before 'maybe next month' for clarity. Ensure subject possession and number are consistent.