Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は内容が分かるが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が目立ちます。例えば時制（過去形）や冠詞、年齢表現（"when I was 10"）の訂正が必要です。また、最後の文は意味が曖昧なので、具体的な活動や感情の描写で締めると良いです。リンク表現を使って理由や頻度を明確にし、文を3〜4文にまとめて自然に話してください。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often played basketball there with my neighborhood friends, and when I was ten I played almost every weekend because we enjoyed competing. We also practiced together before games, so it felt like a small team.

제안: 意味は何となく伝わるものの、語彙の選び方や語順が不自然です（例えば"wondering"は適切でない、"affair"や"what happened each other"は誤用）。過去の出来事について話すときは明確な時制を使い、つなぎの表現（"for example", "last week"）を入れてください。文を整理し、会話の流れに沿って具体例を一つ加えると良いです。

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks. I often go there with my friends to walk and talk; for example, last week we met at the park and chatted about what had happened at university recently.

제안: 伝えたい内容は明確ですが、表現が断片的で文法ミス（"it's like kind of"、"there are a few nature"）があります。より自然な英語では"because my town is largely industrial"や"there is little green space"のように言います。また、理由と結果をつなぐ接続詞（"because", "so"）を適切に使い、具体的にどんな公園が欲しいかを付け加えると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I would. Because my town is largely industrial, there is very little green space, so I would like more parks where people can walk, relax, and enjoy nature.

제안: 内容は伝わるが、文法と語順のミスが目立ちます（"I have been to there at once"や"I want to again"）。過去の体験には過去形を使い、再訪の意思は"I would like to go again"や"I want to visit again"と表現しましょう。場所の簡単な描写を付け加えると回答が豊かになります。

예시: Yes. There's a park in Takasaki City that I visited once when I was sixteen with my friends. It was really beautiful, and I would love to visit it again because the views and gardens were impressive.

× Yes. When I was a child, I really like going to the park to play basketball with my neighborhood friends.

✓ Yes. When I was a child, I really liked going to the park to play basketball with my neighborhood friends.

The sentence refers to a past habitual action (when I was a child), so the past simple tense 'liked' should be used instead of the present simple 'like'. Use past tense for actions completed or habitual in the past.

× When I was a 10, I played basketball every weekend because it was so much fun and we enjoyed competing with each other.

✓ When I was 10, I played basketball every weekend because it was so much fun and we enjoyed competing with each other.

Use no article before ages: say 'When I was 10' not 'When I was a 10'. The article 'a' is unnecessary with age expressions.

× Finally, we prepared to play.

✓ Finally, we got ready to play.

The verb 'prepared' is not incorrect but 'prepared to play' is less natural in this context; 'got ready to play' or 'prepared to play' followed by more context is clearer. Use a more natural collocation.

× It's like I often go to the park with my friends just wondering and talking.

✓ I often go to the park with my friends just wandering and talking.

The phrase 'It's like' is unnecessary and 'wondering' (thinking) is the wrong verb; 'wandering' (walking around) fits the context. Also remove 'It's like' to form a simple present habitual statement.

× The affair what happened each other recently and the last week I went to with my friends.

✓ We talk about things that happened to each other recently, and last week I went there with my friends.

The original is ungrammatical: 'the affair what happened each other' is incorrect relative clause and reflexive phrasing. Use 'things that happened to each other' or 'what happened to each other'. Also separate the two ideas with 'and' and correct word order 'went there'.

× Yes, I think so. It's because in my town it's like kind of. Industrial town, so there are a few nature.

✓ Yes, I think so. It's because my town is somewhat industrial, so there is little natural scenery.

'It's like kind of. Industrial town' is awkward. Use 'my town is somewhat industrial' or 'a kind of industrial town'. 'there are a few nature' is incorrect: use 'little natural scenery' or 'few natural areas' depending on meaning.

× I want to see more nature and walk around there.

✓ I want to see more natural areas and walk around them.

'See more nature' is non-idiomatic; 'natural areas' or 'green spaces' is more natural. Also use 'walk around them' to refer back to 'areas'.

× Yes, there is. That's in Takasaki City.

✓ Yes, there is. It's in Takasaki City.

Use 'It's in Takasaki City' to refer to a park. 'That's in Takasaki City' is conversational but 'It's' is more natural. This addresses 'there is' followed by a clearer pronoun reference.

× Actually. I have been to there at once when I was 16 years old with my friends.

✓ Actually, I went there once when I was 16 years old with my friends.

'Been to there' is incorrect word order; use 'been there' or 'went there'. Also 'at once' is wrong for 'one time'—use 'once'. For a specific past time ('when I was 16'), simple past 'went' is preferred over present perfect 'have been'.

× It's really beautiful and I want to again.

✓ It's really beautiful and I want to go again.

The verb 'want' should be followed by the infinitive 'to go' not alone 'to'. 'I want to again' is missing the verb; correct form is 'I want to go again'.