Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise, use past tense consistently, avoid repetition and hesitations. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g. “Yes, I loved going to parks as a child.”), then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words (because/so/for example). Correct grammar: use past simple and plural forms where needed.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I spent most days indoors, so visiting the park felt like a refreshing change where I could run, play games, and breathe fresh air.

제안: Answer directly and reduce hesitations. Use simple clear reasons with linking words (because/so) and avoid vague phrases. Say how often you go and give a specific example of what prevents you from visiting to sound more credible.

예시: Not really. I rarely go to parks now because I am very busy with work and study, so I don't have enough free time to relax there. For example, I usually finish work late and often use weekends to catch up on assignments.

제안: Make the response smoother and more natural: start with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons and an example. Remove filler words and avoid repeating phrases. Use plural/singular properly and concise linking words (because, for example, therefore).

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would benefit people of all ages because they provide space for exercise and relaxation. For example, young families could have picnic areas while older people could use walking paths and benches.

제안: Be clear and confident. Use a short direct answer and a concise reason. Avoid filler sounds and unclear phrases. If possible, offer a brief future possibility or alternative to show language range.

예시: No, I don't have any specific parks I plan to visit because I generally prefer other activities. However, if a friend invited me I might change my mind and go for a short walk or picnic.

× Yes, I would love to go to park at outside because when I was a child I was only in the room for minute hours, so if I had a chance to go to park as a child I would love it.

✓ Yes, I loved going to the park outside because when I was a child I spent only a few minutes or hours in my room, so if I had a chance to go to the park I would have loved it.

Errors: missing definite article before 'park' and inconsistent tense/forms. Use 'the park' for a specific place (article error, ID 22). 'At outside' is incorrect preposition use; use 'outside' without 'at' (preposition error, ID 11). 'Only in the room for minute hours' is ungrammatical: use 'spent only a few minutes or hours in my room' (sentence structure and word choice; IDs 26 and 13). 'If I had a chance... I would love it' mixes conditional forms; in past hypothetical use 'would have loved it' or rephrase as a simple past 'I loved going'. Suggestion: choose consistent tense (simple past for past habits) and include the definite article before 'park'.

× In the present time, I don't like to go to parks because, uh, lots of things, uh, are there which I should do in a time. So there is not enough time to visit in the park or to spend some quality, quality time in the park.

✓ At present, I don't like going to parks because there are many things I need to do, so I don't have enough time to visit the park or to spend quality time there.

Errors: 'In the present time' is awkward; use 'At present' or 'Nowadays' (style). 'I don't like to go to parks' is acceptable but 'don't like going to parks' is more natural (verb + -ing form, ID 8). 'Lots of things are there which I should do in a time' has incorrect word order and prepositions; use 'there are many things I need to do' and avoid 'in a time' (preposition error, ID 11; sentence structure, ID 26). 'Visit in the park' is incorrect preposition; say 'visit the park' or 'go to the park' (preposition/article errors, IDs 11 and 22). 'Quality, quality time' is repetition; use 'quality time' (word choice, ID 13). Use consistent tense and natural verb forms.

× Yes, I would like to uh, see more parks in my city because the lots of people from uh, different ages and different ages from child to old man or woman loves to enjoy their quality time and spend their time in the park. So if there will be more parks in the city, I will love it.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because many people of different ages, from children to elderly men and women, enjoy spending quality time in parks. If there were more parks in the city, I would be very happy.

Errors: 'the lots of people' incorrect article and quantifier; use 'many people' (article/quantifier error, IDs 22 and 14). 'Different ages and different ages' is repetitive and ungrammatical (sentence structure, ID 26). 'Child to old man or woman' is awkward and unidiomatic; use 'children to elderly men and women' (pronoun/adjective use, ID 12/13). 'Loves' does not agree with 'people' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27 or third person singular issue ID 2); use 'enjoy'. 'If there will be more parks... I will love it' mixes future conditional; for hypothetical use 'If there were more parks... I would be' (conditional tense error, ID 7). Suggestion: correct quantifiers, noun phrases, subject-verb agreement, and use proper conditional form.

× No, there are not, uh, any parks where I want to go in the future because I don't like to spend my time in parks. So are so, yeah.

✓ No, there are no parks I want to go to in the future because I don't like spending my time in parks.

Errors: 'there are not any parks where I want to go' is understandable but 'there are no parks I want to go to' is more natural (sentence structure, ID 26). 'I don't like to spend my time in parks' is acceptable but 'I don't like spending my time in parks' is more fluent (verb + -ing form, ID 8). The fragment 'So are so, yeah' is meaningless and should be removed (sentence structure/fragment, IDs 26 and 23). Suggestion: remove filler words and use natural gerund forms for preferences.