Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise, correct small grammar errors and add a brief specific detail to support your statement. Begin with a clear topic sentence, then one supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid redundant phrases like “that was the relaxing moment.”

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, my parents would take me to a small lakeside park every weekend, where I played on the swings and fed ducks, which made those afternoons very relaxing.

제안: Improve grammar (articles, plurals) and tighten the answer. Use one linking word to connect idea and give a specific example of what you enjoy about the park’s atmosphere.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. For instance, after a long workweek I often invite friends to a nearby park because the fresh air and quiet paths help me relax and chat with them.

제안: Make the reply more direct and correct grammar (use plurals and avoid filler phrases like “you know”). Provide a specific reason and one concrete benefit of having more parks to strengthen the answer.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they offer green space for families and children; for example, additional parks would give children safe places to play and improve local air quality.

제안: Clarify your meaning, fix grammar and coherence, and be specific about the park and why you want to visit. Avoid unclear phrases like “My countries have many times apart.” Use one or two sentences with a linking word to explain attractions you expect to see.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit Kung Fu National Park in the future because it is home to many wildlife species and diverse flora; for example, I want to see rare birds and hike through its unique forests.