Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 用更自然和完整的句子直接回答问题，注意时态一致（过去式），減少冗余並補充具體細節。可以按主題句+一到兩句細節的結構來組織答案，並用連接詞使表述流暢。例如把“my mother always”改為完整行為描述，描述一次具體記憶會更生動。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My mother often took me there and bought me ice cream while I played on the swings. I especially remember having a picnic on sunny afternoons, which made those visits very special.

제안: 回應已較自然但可更簡潔且注意語法（如冠詞和時態）。保持主題句後用連接詞如“so”或“therefore”引出原因或頻率，並給出具體活動以豐富內容。限定在最多五句內。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Although I am very busy, I try to visit a park every weekend to get some fresh air and relax. Going for a short walk or reading a book there helps me recharge.

제안: 答案含義明確但表達不流暢且有語法錯誤（重複詞、主語位置等）。應先直接回答（Yes/No），然後用一兩句具體原因支持，使用連接詞如“because”或“so”。避免模糊詞語，具體說明缺乏公園對你的影響。

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because we have beautiful beaches but few green spaces. As a result, there are limited places for children to play and for residents to relax, so new parks would improve the community's quality of life.

제안: 回答要更精確並改善詞彙和流暢性。先給出明確的公園名稱和原因，使用正確的短語（e.g., “Yellowstone National Park in the U.S.”），避免重複詞“the the”。提供具體想看的景象或活動（如看間歇泉、徒步）。

예시: Yes, I would love to visit Yellowstone National Park in the United States because of its rich biodiversity and unique geothermal features. I'm especially excited to see the geysers like Old Faithful and to go hiking in the scenic landscapes.

× Yes, when I was a child I love to go into the park, my mother always. My mother often bought me ice creams, which is delicious and we play on the swing and have picnic. Make this recited special.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I loved to go to the park. My mother often bought me ice creams, which were delicious, and we played on the swings and had picnics.

句子描述过去的经历，应使用过去时态；“love”需改为“loved”，“go into the park”更常用“go to the park”；“my mother always”位置错误且多余，改为“My mother often”；“ice creams, which is delicious” 中的指代和时态不一致，改为复数过去“were delicious”；“we play on the swing and have picnic”应改为过去时并使用复数名词和固定搭配，改为“we played on the swings and had picnics”。建议：回顾一般过去时的用法；注意主句时态一致；名词单复数应与动词和指代一致。

× Yes, I love going to park now. I'm very busy these days, but every weekend I will try to go to the park and get some fresh air to relax. It's very important to me.

✓ Yes, I love going to the park now. I'm very busy these days, but every weekend I try to go to the park to get some fresh air and relax. It's very important to me.

“going to park”缺冠词，应为“going to the park”。句子在表达习惯性动作时更常用一般现在时而非“will try”后接现在时，改为“I try to go”；“to get some fresh air to relax”中不需要两个不定式，可改为“to get some fresh air and relax”。建议：注意固定搭配“go to the park”；区分一般现在时和将来时；简化并列动词结构。

× Yes, I love to see more parks in my city. In my city is a is a small city near to the sea. We have beach, we have beautiful beach, but we don't have many parks. Sometimes I have no play.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city. My city is a small city near the sea. We have a beach, a beautiful beach, but we don't have many parks. Sometimes I have nothing to do.

“love to see”在表达愿望时用“would like to”更自然（也可保留“I love to”但上下文更合适）；“In my city is a is a small city near to the sea”有结构重复和介词问题，改为“My city is a small city near the sea”；“We have beach, we have beautiful beach”缺不定冠词，改为“We have a beach, a beautiful beach”；“Sometimes I have no play”是错误表达，应使用“nothing to do”表示没事可做。建议：注意冠词a/the的使用；避免句子重复与多余词；学习常用表达“nothing to do”。

× Yes, I really want to the American Yellowstone National Park. I think there are biodiversity and I really love the the the beautiful.

✓ Yes, I really want to visit America's Yellowstone National Park. I think it has rich biodiversity and I really love its beauty.

“want to the American Yellowstone National Park”缺动词，且所有格和介词使用不当，需加动词“visit”或用所有格“America's Yellowstone National Park”；“I think there are biodiversity”搭配错误，应为“it has rich biodiversity”或“there is rich biodiversity”；“I really love the the the beautiful”重复且结构不完整，应为“I really love its beauty”。建议：注意动词补足结构（want to do sth）；使用恰当的主语指代和名词搭配；避免重复词。