Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and organize your answer: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect tense/word forms. Focus on clarity, correct grammar (past tense), and limit to 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park near the centre of my village when I was a child. It was very close to my school, so my friends and I often spent our breaks there playing games. We made many happy memories, such as climbing the old tree and sharing snacks.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give a brief reason and one specific detail. Use clearer vocabulary and correct article usage. Avoid filler words like "uh" and reduce repetition.

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks, although I am very busy with work. There is a green area in front of my house inside a government compound, and I usually walk there in the evenings to relax and get some fresh air.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence saying yes or no, then provide two concise, specific reasons using linking words (for example, "because" / "also"). Avoid vague phrases and grammatical errors; use correct plural/singular forms.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because they improve air quality and provide green spaces for exercise. Also, parks offer public meeting places where neighbours can socialise and discuss community issues.

제안: Answer directly about future intentions; if you want to talk about memories, link them briefly to future plans. Use correct tense and avoid repetition. Be specific about which park and what you would like to do there in the future.

예시: Yes. There is a park in the Polar District where my daughters and I created many memories, and I would like to visit it again. In the future I hope to take my daughter there to play on the sand and walk together as a family.

× Yes, I used to go to a park that was located at the central part of my village and it was just close to my school and now in the middle of school I along with my friends went there and usually spent their time in the during our break and we have a lot of memories there. We were spent.

✓ Yes, I used to go to a park in the center of my village that was very close to my school. During school breaks, my friends and I would go there and usually spend our time, so we have many memories there.

The original contains run-on clauses, incorrect word order, and irrelevant fragments ('now in the middle of school', 'We were spent'). Break the sentence into clear clauses, use correct prepositions ('in the center'), correct subject order ('my friends and I'), and proper tense/aspect ('used to' and 'would' for past habitual). Remove meaningless fragments and redundant words. Suggestion: divide long sentences into shorter ones and maintain consistent past habitual forms. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Uh, actually nowadays I remain very busy with my work, but after going back from my work, uh, there is a park in front of my house. It's not actually park. There's a government office compound complex. And after going back from my work, I go there to have a walk in the evening.

✓ Actually, nowadays I am very busy with my work, but there is a park in front of my house. It's not actually a park but a government office compound, and after I return from work I go there for a walk in the evening.

Errors include incorrect verb form 'remain' (use 'am' for current state), awkward phrase 'after going back from my work' (use 'after I return from work'), missing article 'a park', and redundancy. Also 'have a walk' is acceptable but 'go for a walk' is more natural. Suggestion: use 'am' for present simple state, include articles, and use natural collocations. Grammar problem type ID:6

× I think having parks is very important for a city it it gives the environment clean. Secondly, there the people can get together at this place and share their ideas and opinions about the government, about the socio economic conditions. So it's very important to have a park lot of.

✓ I think having parks is very important for a city because they keep the environment clean. Also, people can gather there to share their ideas and opinions about the government and socioeconomic conditions. So it is important to have many parks.

Problems: repeated 'it it', incorrect adjective/adverb order 'gives the environment clean' (use 'keep the environment clean'), awkward phrasing 'there the people can get together at this place', and 'park lot of' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'parks' to match general statement and 'many parks' for quantity. Suggestion: use 'because' to connect reason, 'keep the environment clean', 'gather' as a natural verb, and 'socioeconomic' as a single word. Grammar_problem_type_id:13

× Yes, when I was posted in the Polar District police, there was a park and we, I, I and my daughters, my daughters and I have a lot of memories there. We when she was one years old, one year old, we go there and spend time together. She used to play with the Sands and.

✓ Yes, when I was posted in the Polar District police, there was a park where my daughters and I made many memories. When my daughter was one year old, we would go there and spend time together. She used to play with the sand.

Issues: confused subject order and repetition ('we, I, I and my daughters, my daughters and I'), tense inconsistency ('have a lot of memories' should be past for past period), incorrect plural 'one years old' should be 'one year old', wrong present tense 'we go there' should be past habitual 'we would go', and capitalization/spelling 'Sands' should be 'sand'. Suggestion: use consistent past tense for past events, correct singular/plural forms, avoid repetition, and use natural past habitual expressions like 'used to' or 'would'. Grammar_problem_type_id:5