Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Good direct answer with relevant supporting details and clear personal reflection. To improve, make the response slightly more concise (avoid minor redundancy) and add one linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly. Also include a brief specific memory or sensory detail to make it more vivid.

예시: Yes, I did. My parents often took me to a nearby park on weekends, and I usually played on the swings or rode my bike with my friends. For example, I remember racing my best friend to the big oak tree every Saturday, which made those mornings really exciting.

제안: Clear and natural answer with a direct topic sentence and good reasons. To improve, use a linking word to connect frequency and benefit, and add a specific detail about what you do on walks (e.g., watch birds, read, exercise) to enrich content.

예시: Yes, I do. Although I don't go to parks very often, I enjoy visiting when I have free time because I like taking walks to get fresh air and clear my mind. For instance, I often stroll along the lake path and watch the ducks, which helps me relax.

제안: Direct answer but slightly abrupt and contains a small grammatical error (‘that enough’). To improve, correct the grammar, provide a brief reason with a linking word, and offer a minor suggestion or exception to show more balanced thinking.

예시: No, I don't think so, because my city already has many parks and most people can find one nearby. However, I would welcome more small green spaces in dense neighborhoods where parks are scarce.

제안: Strong, natural response with a clear reason and personal preference. To improve further, add a linking phrase and a specific activity or attraction in Hyde Park to show knowledge and make the answer more vivid.

예시: Yes, I'd like to visit Hyde Park in London one day because, from photos and descriptions, it looks beautiful and peaceful. For example, I would love to walk around the Serpentine and maybe rent a boat or sit by the Rose Garden to relax.

× No, I don't think so. My city already has a lot of parks, so I think that enough people can easily find the park nearby.

✓ No, I don't think so. My city already has a lot of parks, so I think that enough people can easily find a park nearby.

The phrase 'the park nearby' incorrectly uses the definite article 'the' implying a specific park previously mentioned, but the meaning is general (any nearby park). This is an article/quantifier issue. Replacing 'the park nearby' with 'a park nearby' correctly matches the indefinite reference. Alternatively, you can say 'find parks nearby' for a plural general meaning.

× Looking back, those are some of my happiest.

✓ Looking back, those were some of my happiest moments.

The original sentence 'those are some of my happiest' is incomplete because 'happiest' needs a noun to modify (e.g., 'moments'). Also, because the speaker refers to childhood (past), past tense 'were' is more consistent than present 'are'. This is a sentence structure and tense consistency issue. Add the noun 'moments' and change 'are' to 'were' to make the sentence complete and temporally consistent.

× I like taking a walk and getting some fresh air.

✓ I like taking walks and getting some fresh air.

The structure 'taking a walk' is not strictly incorrect, but in general statements about habitual activities, the plural noun 'walks' is more natural: 'taking walks.' This is a minor noun/verb+ -ing collocation issue. Use 'taking walks' to sound more idiomatic when describing a general habit.

× I've seen in photos and it looks really beautiful and peaceful.

✓ I've seen it in photos and it looks really beautiful and peaceful.

The verb phrase 'I've seen in photos' lacks an object — what was seen? This is an omission of the object rather than a verb form error, but it relates to correct use of past participle in a present perfect construction with an object. Insert 'it' to clarify the object: 'I've seen it in photos.' This makes the sentence grammatically complete and clear.