Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more direct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid hesitation sounds (umm) and redundant phrases. Use linking words like 'because' to connect reasons and include a brief example or memory to make the answer more vivid.

예시: Yes, I liked the idea of going to parks as a child, but we didn't have any in my neighborhood. Because of that, my friends and I usually walked around the streets and played simple games outside; for example, we often played tag near a small market every afternoon.

제안: Organize the response: give a clear direct answer, then two concise, specific reasons linked logically. Replace vague phrases ('I guess', 'one of those people') with confident language. Limit to four sentences and avoid repeating similar ideas.

예시: Yes, I do enjoy going to parks now. Firstly, I like the scenery and fresh air, which helps me relax after a busy day. Secondly, I enjoy watching families and pets because it feels lively and cheerful.

제안: Answer directly and provide specific reasons and examples. Avoid filler words like 'umm' and vague terms such as 'or whatever'. Use linking words like 'because' and 'for example' to structure details. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for relaxation and exercise. For example, I would enjoy parks with lakes or walking trails where my friends and I could meet on weekends.

제안: Be specific rather than saying you can't remember names. Choose a type or a known famous park and explain why you'd like to visit it. Remove hesitation ('uh') and weak phrases ('I guess') and use linking words like 'for instance' to give a concrete example.

예시: I can't recall specific names, but I'd like to visit a large botanical garden or a national park in the future because I enjoy diverse plant life and scenic hikes. For instance, I'd love to visit a famous botanical garden abroad to see rare plants and learn about different ecosystems.

× I definitely would have loved to go to parks as a child but unfortunately we didn't have any so I just settled on going out on the streets, umm, walking around with my friends but definitely not going much to parks even though I really want to.

✓ I definitely would have loved to go to parks as a child, but unfortunately we didn't have any, so I just settled on going out into the streets, walking around with my friends, but definitely not going to parks much even though I really wanted to.

The sentence mixes past conditional and present tense expressions. 'Would have loved' and 'didn't have' are past; 'I really want to' is present and should match the past context — change to 'I really wanted'. Also word order and preposition: use 'going to parks much' (place + frequency) and 'going out into the streets' is more natural. Break the long sentence with commas for clarity.

× As I got older, I definitely think that I like going to parks much more now.

✓ As I got older, I definitely think that I like going to parks much more now.

No grammatical correction required for tense here; sentence correctly contrasts past change with present preference. No action needed according to the rule to only correct listed problem types.

× I get to enjoy the good views, I get to see children playing with their dogs or just have us seeing a lot of people having fun.

✓ I get to enjoy the good views, I get to see children playing with their dogs, or just see a lot of people having fun.

The phrase 'have us seeing' is incorrect: after 'or just' a parallel verb phrase is needed. Use the present participle 'playing' is fine, but replace 'have us seeing' with 'see' to maintain parallel structure and correct verb form.

× Right now, since I'm in a new city, I haven't really been able to go to any of the parks.

✓ Right now, since I'm in a new city, I haven't really been able to go to any parks.

'Any of the parks' is grammatical but slightly awkward; 'any parks' is more natural in this general context. Tense 'haven't been able' correctly expresses present perfect inability, so no tense change is needed.

× So I guess I would love to be able to just, umm, explore all of the park options here in our city, go out with my friends, see the beautiful green scenery, the lakes, the ponds, or whatever the park can offer us.

✓ So I guess I would love to be able to just explore all the park options here in my city, go out with my friends, and see the beautiful green scenery, the lakes, the ponds, or whatever the parks can offer.

Use 'in my city' rather than 'in our city' for consistency with earlier 'I'm in a new city' (pronoun clarity). 'All of the park options' -> 'all the park options' is more natural. 'Whatever the park can offer us' should be plural 'parks' to match 'park options'. Add 'and' for proper coordination.

× I'm not really good with remembering the names of parks, so I can't really think of one on the top of my head.

✓ I'm not really good at remembering the names of parks, so I can't really think of one off the top of my head.

Preposition choice: 'good at' is correct collocation, not 'good with' (this is a preposition issue but also common usage). 'On the top of my head' is incorrect idiom; correct is 'off the top of my head'. These keep the present-tense meaning.

× But to answer your question, I guess I would really just love to go to any type of park.

✓ But to answer your question, I guess I would really just love to go to any type of park.

Sentence is acceptable as present conditional desire; no past-tense correction needed. No change required.