Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incorrect verb forms. For example, use past tense consistently, say 'I loved going to parks as a child' and follow with reasons linked by 'because' or 'and'.

예시: I loved going to parks as a child because they were a fun place to unwind after tutoring. For example, I often played on the swings and games with my friends, which helped me relax and enjoy my free time.

제안: Use correct tense and clearer structure. Begin with a direct topic sentence (Yes/No + brief reason), then add a specific example using linking words like 'however' or 'when'. Avoid fragments.

예시: I don't usually go to parks now because I am busy with work and studies. However, I do visit parks occasionally when I meet my childhood friends so we can reminisce and catch up.

제안: Be accurate with grammar and give precise reasons. Start with a clear statement, then give two specific consequences using linking words like 'for example' or 'therefore'. Use plural and possessive forms correctly.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide safe places for children to play and help reduce crowding. For example, there are only two parks now, so they are often overcrowded; if we had more parks, families could spread out and children would have more space to play.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence and consistent tense. Give one or two specific reasons and a brief past reference using linking words like 'because' and 'last time'. Avoid awkward phrasing like 'I like to go love Kush Park'.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Qush Park in Delhi in the future because it is known for its beautiful gardens and great swings. Last time I was in Delhi the park was closed, so next time I hope to visit and spend an afternoon enjoying the scenery.

× Yes I will I would like to going to park in my childhood because whenever I got free from my tuition classes I went to Parker for some for some entertainment purpose and making fun with my friends and play with them and also for swings also.

✓ Yes. I used to go to the park in my childhood because whenever I got free from my tuition classes I went to the park for entertainment, to have fun and play with my friends, and to use the swings.

Errors: incorrect modal/tense phrases 'I will I would like to going' and awkward verb forms. Use 'used to' to describe habitual past actions. Remove redundant modals and correct 'going to park' to 'go to the park.' Also fix 'Parker' to 'park' and streamline repetition. Suggestion: use 'used to' + base verb for past habits and ensure prepositions ('to the park') and nouns are correct.

× On normal days I don't like to go park nowadays because I don't have an enough time to go any park but when when me and my childhood friends meet up. So we went there to memorize our old memories and.

✓ On normal days I don't like to go to parks nowadays because I don't have enough time to go to any park, but when my childhood friends and I meet up, we go there to remember old memories.

Errors: missing articles and incorrect pronoun order. Use 'go to parks' or 'go to the park' and 'enough time' without 'an.' Use 'my childhood friends and I' (subject order and pronoun case). Replace 'memorize our old memories' with 'remember old memories.' Also complete the sentence instead of trailing off. Suggestion: check article usage ('a/an/the'), correct pronoun order, and use appropriate verbs for recalling memories.

× I like to see more and more parks in my city because it's very helpful for children's and for their entertainment purpose.

✓ I would like to see more and more parks in my city because they are very helpful for children and for their entertainment.

Errors: incorrect article/plural form 'children's' used improperly and agreement with 'it' for plural 'parks.' Use 'they are' for parks and 'children' (plural noun) not possessive 'children's.' Remove 'purpose' which is redundant. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and correct noun forms.

× For example, in my city there is only one or two parks and all the children's crowded there.

✓ For example, in my city there are only one or two parks and all the children crowd there.

Errors: quantifier and agreement. Use 'there are' for plural and better phrasing 'only one or two parks.' 'Children's crowded' is wrong: use 'children crowd' (verb) or 'are crowded.' Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement with quantifiers and use plural nouns correctly.

× So if there are many parks, almost all children goes to some other destinations.

✓ So if there are many parks, almost all children go to other places.

Error: subject-verb agreement 'children goes' should be 'children go.' Also 'some other destinations' is wordy; use 'other places.' Suggestion: match plural subjects with plural verbs and prefer concise vocabulary.

× Yes, in future I like to go love Kush Park which is situated in Delhi because it's very famous for its swings and its natural beauty.

✓ Yes, in the future I would like to go to Luv Kush Park, which is located in Delhi, because it is famous for its swings and natural beauty.

Errors: tense and modal phrasing. Use 'would like to' for future desire. Add article 'the future' and preposition 'to' before park. Correct park name spelling if intended ('Luv Kush'). Use 'located' instead of 'situated' optionally and avoid repeating 'its.' Suggestion: use 'would like to' for polite future intentions and include necessary prepositions and commas for clauses.

× So I want to go there. Last time when I visit Delhi, the park is closed, so whenever I visit next time I usually go there.

✓ So I want to go there. Last time I visited Delhi, the park was closed, so next time I visit I will go there.

Errors: inconsistent past tense 'visit' should be 'visited' and 'is closed' should be 'was closed.' Also 'whenever I visit next time I usually go there' mixes tenses and aspect; use 'next time I visit I will go there' for a future intention. Suggestion: keep past events in past tense and future intentions in future/modal form ('will go').