Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clearer and more grammatical: start with a direct topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct tense and simple vocabulary (e.g., played, visited, climbed, smelled, took photos). Keep it within 3–4 sentences and use linking words like 'and' or 'also' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child. I especially enjoyed climbing trees and smelling the flowers, and I often took photos of the plants. I also used to play games with other children there.

제안: Make a clear direct response and explain why you still go. Use cohesive words (because, so, to) and correct verb forms. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and unclear phrases like 'where I am ignore.' Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I still like going to parks because they help me relax. I often go there to read or take a walk to clear my mind.

제안: Expand the short answer with a reason and one specific detail. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add a linked reason using 'because' or 'so'. This will make your reply more natural and informative.

예시: Definitely yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they provide green space for families to relax. For example, more small neighborhood parks would make it easier for people to exercise or take their children outside.

제안: Provide a clearer, grammatical description of the park you want to visit and give a specific reason or activity. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' and avoid repetition. Limit to 2–3 concise sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a large park with a peaceful lake because I enjoy watching birds and taking photographs. I would also like to walk along the lakeside and have a picnic there.

× Yes, I like to go to park when I move children I especially I Scotch the tree and flower and take photos on their.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park when I was a child. I especially used to look at the trees and flowers and take photos of them.

Errors: 'to go to park' needs the definite article 'the' (Article errors, ID 22). 'when I move children' is unclear and likely intended as 'when I was a child' (Sentence structure/tense; use past tense). 'I especially I Scotch the tree and flower' contains wrong verb choice and word order; 'Scotch' is incorrect and should be 'look at' or 'used to look at' (Incorrect word choice and sentence structure, ID 26). 'take photos on their' uses wrong preposition and pronoun; use 'take photos of them' (Incorrect use of prepositions and pronouns, IDs 11 and 12). Suggestions: use past tense for childhood habit ('liked', 'used to'), include articles ('the park'), replace incorrect verbs with appropriate verbs ('look at'), and use correct preposition and pronoun ('of them').

× Yes, where I am ignore or uh though I will go to the park to relax myself.

✓ Yes, even though I am busy, I still go to the park to relax.

Errors: 'where I am ignore or uh' is ungrammatical and unclear; likely means 'even though I am busy' (Sentence structure and present tense clarity, ID 6). 'I will go to the park to relax myself' mixes future 'will' with habitual present; the question asks about current habit so use present simple 'I go' or present continuous. Also 'relax myself' is unnatural; use 'relax' or 'relax myself' minimally but 'relax' is preferred (Incorrect use of reflexive/pronoun and verb tense, IDs 15 and 6). Suggestion: express current habit in present simple and use natural phrasing 'even though I am busy, I still go to the park to relax.'

× Definitely yes.

✓ Definitely, yes, I would.

Error: short response 'Definitely yes.' is acceptable colloquially but lacks sentence completeness in context. This is a sentence structure/style issue (ID 26). Suggestion: provide a slightly fuller response such as 'Definitely, yes, I would' or 'Definitely, yes, I would like more parks.' to match the question asking preference for more parks.

× Sure, I really want to go to a large park where I can see the peaceful lake we we view and more.

✓ Sure, I really want to go to a large park where I can see the peaceful lake and enjoy the view and more.

Errors: 'the peaceful lake we we view and more' contains repetition 'we we' and wrong word order. Use 'see the peaceful lake and enjoy the view' (Article usage for 'the peaceful lake' is fine but sentence structure is wrong, IDs 26 and 22). Also 'and more' is vague but acceptable; better to say 'and other scenery' if needed. Suggestion: remove repetition, correct word order to 'see the peaceful lake and enjoy the view', and keep definite article 'the' before 'peaceful lake'.