Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, correct tense/word choice and add one specific detail. Use linking words if adding details.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I often went on weekends with my grandma, my parents and my brother, usually riding my bicycle. We would feed the ducks and have a small picnic, which was my favourite part.

제안: Make the answer more natural and organized: open with a topic sentence, use linking words (for example, sometimes/other times), avoid repetition and pronunciation errors (maté). Give one specific example of an activity.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. On weekends I often go with friends because our city has a lovely riverside; sometimes we walk along the river and other times we sit in the park and drink maté while chatting.

제안: Be concise and accurate: correct grammar (singular/plural), avoid unclear phrases ("ring mate"), and structure with a clear opinion then brief supporting details. Use specific activities as examples.

예시: I think my city already has many parks, but I would welcome more green space. For example, Independence Park is great for meeting friends and having breakfast at a café, and River Park is popular for jogging and cycling.

제안: Clarify and correct expression: give a clear reason and one specific detail about the park. Use linking words and correct word order ("I would like to go to...").

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Orchestra Park in the future because it hosts cultural events. For example, they often have live music performances and community games, which I would love to attend.

× Yes, I like I used to go to the park with my grandma and my parents at the weekends.

✓ Yes, I liked going to the park with my grandma and my parents on weekends.

The student mixes present 'I like' with past 'I used to'. The context asks about childhood, so past tense 'liked' or 'I used to like' is appropriate. Also, use 'on weekends' (no article) and 'going to the park' is a natural gerund form. Suggestion: choose a consistent past form: 'I used to go to the park with my grandma and my parents on weekends.'

× I used to go with my cycle, my bicycle and my brother.

✓ I used to go by bicycle with my brother.

The phrase 'go with my cycle' is unnatural and 'cycle' is redundant with 'bicycle'. Use the preposition 'by' with transport 'by bicycle'. Also combine 'my cycle, my bicycle and my brother' into a clear structure: 'by bicycle with my brother.'

× Yes, I like on the weekends I go to the park with my friends because I live in a city with a river and sometimes we walk around the river or other other times we go to the park and drink matte there.

✓ Yes, on weekends I go to the park with my friends because I live in a city with a river, and sometimes we walk along the river; other times we go to the park and drink mate there.

The sentence has repetition ('other other'), awkward word order ('Yes, I like on the weekends'), and spelling error 'matte' should be 'mate' (if referring to the South American drink). Use 'on weekends' and 'walk along the river' (common collocation). Also split ideas with a semicolon or conjunction for clarity. Maintain present habitual tense 'I go'.

× I believe that my city has a lot of park.

✓ I believe that my city has a lot of parks.

'A lot of' must be followed by a plural count noun when referring to multiple items. 'Park' should be plural 'parks'. Alternatively 'a lot of green space' could be used if non-count.

× It has the Independence park where you can meet friends and ring mate there or have have breakfast on a bar.

✓ There is Independence Park where you can meet friends, drink mate, or have breakfast at a cafe.

Use 'There is' for existence (There be issue) and proper noun capitalization 'Independence Park'. 'Ring mate' is likely 'drink mate'. 'Have breakfast on a bar' is incorrect; use 'at a cafe' or 'at a bar' depending on meaning. Remove duplicated 'have'. Suggest clearer verb choices and proper preposition 'at'.

× Then it has the river park. There you can do some sports.

✓ There is also the River Park, where you can do some sports.

Use 'There is' to introduce a place and capitalize proper noun 'River Park'. Combine sentences for flow: 'There is also the River Park, where you can do sports.' Maintains present ability 'can do'.

× Yes, I would like go to Orchestra Park because in the they are the society do some cultural events Li with music and some games.

✓ Yes, I would like to go to Orchestra Park because there the community organizes cultural events with music and games.

Missing 'to' after 'would like' ('would like to go'). The phrase 'in the they are the society do' is ungrammatical; use 'there the community organizes' or 'the society holds' for clearer subject-verb structure. 'Li' seems extraneous and removed. Maintain conditional/future intent with 'would like to' and use correct present simple for habitual/event descriptions 'organizes'.