Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 句子结构混乱且时态使用不准确，表达不够自然。回答应该直接说明过去的感受，用过去时并给出具体细节，避免重复词和停顿。可以将句子分成主题句+具体细节，控制在3-4句内。

예시: Not really. When I was a child I disliked going to parks because I once had an accident with a tree and got a scar on my left cheek. That memory made me feel nervous about climbing or playing near trees for a long time.

제안: 整体想法清楚但有语法和流利性问题（例如主谓不一致、重复停顿）。建议用更简洁的句子并用连接词（so/also）衔接理由，注意主谓一致和现在习惯用一般现在时或现在完成时并结合频率词。

예시: Actually, I've changed my mind and now I try to visit parks every week. I enjoy the beautiful scenery there and it is also a convenient place for me to exercise, so I find it relaxing and healthy.

제안: 回答含糊且有很多语音重复与词汇使用错误（如“fractional or construction”不通）。建议先直接回答（Yes/No），然后给出两到三个具体理由，使用准确词汇如 “architecture” 或 “urban planning”。避免重复填充词。

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would improve the city's appearance and offer more green spaces for people to relax. They can also showcase local architecture and provide recreational areas for families.

제안: 表达有语法错误和用词不当（如 'been considered' 和 'been lying to go'）。建议用简单明确的句子说明具体公园和原因，提供一点背景或期待的活动细节。

예시: Yes. For example, I would like to visit Huawei Park in Nanjing. It's located on a mountain and I've heard it has many ancient trees and great views, so I want to hike there and take photos.

× Super Frank I'm, I'm not enjoying going to parks as a child, uh, because when I was a kid, I had a bad memory that I was injured because of a tree, which make me the left scar on my face.

✓ Frankly, I didn't enjoy going to parks as a child because when I was a kid I had a bad experience: I was injured by a tree, which left a scar on my face.

错误类型：句子结构和时态混用、动词形式和从句连接问题。说明：原句中时态混乱（“I'm not enjoying”应为过去），短语顺序不自然（如“Super Frank I'm”无意义），使用了不正确的动词形式（“make me the left scar”应为“left a scar”或“which left a scar on my face”）。建议：把时间放在过去时，简化开头用“Frankly”或直接省略，使用清晰的从句连接词并把动词改为正确的过去分词/过去式。

× Uh, honestly I've, I've changed my mind about parks and are now thinking about going to parks every week because I enjoy the beautiful scenery in the parks and also, uh, it is a good place for me to exercise.

✓ Honestly, I've changed my mind about parks and am now thinking of going to parks every week because I enjoy the beautiful scenery and they are good places for me to exercise.

错误类型：主谓一致和现在时态表达问题。说明：原句中“are now thinking”与主语“I”不一致，应该用“am now thinking”。另外，重复使用“in the parks”多余，可简化为“the scenery”或复数“they are good places”。建议：注意主语“I”用“am”，避免不必要的重复，保持时态一致。

× That's an interest that's an interesting in question To me it is a good opportunity to learn about our city's sceneries and the the the fractional or construction. So it is a good choice.

✓ That's an interesting question. To me, it's a good opportunity to learn about our city's scenery and its architecture or construction, so it's a good choice.

错误类型：句子结构错误和词语选择错误。说明：原句有重复和赘词（“interest that's an interesting”与“三个the”），不自然的短语“fractional”用错词，应该是“architecture”或“construction”，并且“sceneries”通常用不可数“scenery”。建议：删去重复，使用正确名词（scenery, architecture/construction），把句子分成两句更清晰。

× Sure, there are many parks that I've been considered, like maybe the Huawei park in Nanjing, which is built on the mountain and I have been lying to go there for a long time because I've heard about its beautiful old trees.

✓ Sure, there are many parks I've been considering, like maybe Huawei Park in Nanjing, which is built on a mountain and I've been wanting to go there for a long time because I've heard about its beautiful old trees.

错误类型：动词+ -ing 形式和动词选择错误。说明：原句中“I've been considered”错误地把被动用于主语，正确应为主动进行时“I've been considering”。“lying to go”是拼写/用词错误，应为“wanting to go”。建议：使用现在完成进行时表示持续的想法（have been considering），并用正确的动词表达愿望（want）。