Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 内容自然且连贯，句子长度适中，但可改进之处包括：1) 开头可直接用主题句更明确回应问题；2) 避免重复表达（如"ride a bike in the park"与"little explorers"的关系可更紧凑）；3) 可加入一两句具体细节（例如公园的景色、一次具体的回忆）以增强画面感。建议练习用一句主题句开头，然后用1–2个连贯的支持句补充细节，并使用连接词（for example, after that）。

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. For example, I used to ride my bicycle with friends along the tree-lined paths, and we would pretend we were explorers discovering new places. After riding for hours, we would sit on a wooden bench and share snacks while watching birds, which made the afternoons feel carefree and joyful.

제안: 回答直接但有语法与用词小错误，以及信息表达可更简洁自然：1) 注意时态和主谓一致（"see"应为"sees"）；2) "disturbing things at work" 表达不太地道，可改为"problems at work"或"stressful things"；3) 可加入连接词使句子更连贯，如"so"或"which"；4) 控制句子数量与长度，避免重复"usually"两次。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. After dinner my mother and I usually take a walk there, and I often talk to her about stressful problems at work. Because she has experienced many ups and downs, she sees things from a balanced perspective and gives me sensible advice, which always helps me calm down.

제안: 回答包含观点和例子，但存在语法及用词问题，并略显冗长：1) 注意冠词与数的一致（"there's also a few"应为"there are also a few"）；2) 可用更自然的连接词和更简洁的表达，避免重复提到和前一问题重复的信息；3) 提供更具体的比较或原因会更好（例如：为什么更多公园有利于不同年龄层）。

예시: Yes, I would. Parks provide a safe, open space for people of all ages to exercise. For instance, in the evenings I often see elderly people practicing Tai Chi or taking part in square dancing, while younger people go for runs — more parks would give everyone more room and options to stay active.

제안: 回答明确且包含计划，但有小的语法与表达问题：1) "taking photos"前的动词形式应与前面并列一致（"go hiking and take photos"）；2) 可加一点具体细节说明国家公园的特色（如山脉、湖泊）以增强说服力；3) 使用连接词如"because"或"so"来更好地连贯原因与计划。

예시: Yes, I plan to visit the National Park near my city next year because it offers stunning mountain views and peaceful lakes. I hope to go hiking on the trails and take photos with my friends, which should be a great way to relax and enjoy nature.

× After a long time of riding, we stopped and sat on the bench to have some snacks.

✓ After riding for a long time, we stopped and sat on the bench to have some snacks.

句子中的短语“After a long time of riding”在英语中不如“After riding for a long time”自然。使用“after + 动名词”结构时，常用“for + 一段时间”来表示持续时间。建议使用“After riding for a long time”。

× My mom has been through many ups and downs in life so she always see problems from a balanced perspective and gives me reasonable advice.

✓ My mom has been through many ups and downs in life, so she always sees problems from a balanced perspective and gives me reasonable advice.

动词与第三人称单数主语不一致。主语“she”应与动词“see”配合为“sees”。此外两个独立分句之间应加逗号或连词后接逗号，以保持句子清晰。建议将“see”改为“sees”。

× Now after dinner my mom and I usually go for a walk in the park and I usually talk about disturbing things at work.

✓ Now, after dinner, my mom and I usually go for a walk in the park and I usually talk about upsetting things at work.

句中“disturbing things at work”用词不太合适，native语境中更常用“upsetting”或“troubling”来表达让人不安的事情。此外插入状语“Now, after dinner,”应以逗号分隔，使句子更通顺。注意此处为习惯性现在时，动词形式保持原形。

× My mom and I usually go for a walk in the park, and we saw many elderly people exercising during Tai chi or participating square dancing, and there's also a few young people running in the park too.

✓ My mom and I usually go for a walk in the park, and we see many elderly people doing Tai chi or participating in square dancing, and there are also a few young people running in the park.

时态不一致：前半句使用一般现在时“usually go”，后半句错误用了过去式“saw”，应改为现在时“see”。此外“exercising during Tai chi”搭配不当，常用表达为“doing Tai chi”。“participating square dancing”缺少介词，应为“participating in square dancing”。“there's”与“a few young people”（复数）不一致，应用“there are”。这些都属于现在时和介词使用以及主谓一致问题。

× For example, I plan to go hiking and taking photos with my friends.

✓ For example, I plan to go hiking and take photos with my friends.

平行结构错误：动词不定式短语“plan to”后面应跟两个并列动作的一致形式，使用“go hiking and take photos”而不是“go hiking and taking photos”。建议将“taking”改为原形“take”。