Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and simplify the response, correct unclear phrases and grammar, and keep it concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Avoid unclear expressions like “playing battle me to be parents.”

예시: Yes. I loved going to parks as a child because my family often played badminton there. For example, my parents and I would visit every weekend to play games and enjoy outdoor activities, which made those visits memorable.

제안: Improve grammar and natural phrasing, use linking words to connect ideas, and provide a specific example of what you do in parks. Limit to up to five sentences and avoid redundancy (e.g., "visit park occasionally" and "always do some work out").

예시: Not really. I don't enjoy parks as much now, but I visit them occasionally when I want to exercise. For instance, I go jogging and do bodyweight exercises in the park two to three times a week to help with weight loss.

제안: Make the sentence structure clearer and correct grammar (articles, prepositions). Give a specific reason and a brief consequence to strengthen the answer, using linking words like ‘because’ or ‘so’.

예시: Yes, definitely. There is a large park near the city, but it is a bit far from my home, so I would like a new park closer to my neighborhood. That would make it easier for people to exercise and spend time outdoors regularly.

제안: Correct sentence fragments and repetition; combine sentences into a clear, coherent response. Provide one specific park or feature you want to see and explain why using linking words. Watch article and noun usage (e.g., 'a park in Seoul' not 'Park in Seoul').

예시: Yes. I would like to visit a park in Seoul because I have never been there and I have heard they are very beautiful. For example, I want to walk along the tree-lined paths and see the traditional gardens and city views.

× Yes, I used to like to go into parks when I was a child because I was really into playing battle me to be parents, so we visited parks often for badminton and other physical activity.

✓ Yes, I used to like going to parks when I was a child because I was really into playing badminton with my parents, so we visited parks often for badminton and other physical activities.

Pronoun phrase 'battle me to be parents' is incorrect and unclear; it should be 'badminton with my parents'. Also use 'used to like going' (gerund) for habitual past activities and pluralize 'activity' to 'activities' to match 'other'. Suggestion: replace the unclear phrase with 'badminton with my parents', use gerund after 'like', and pluralize countable nouns appropriately.

× Frankly speaking, I don't enjoy going to park anymore, but I do visit park occasionally, especially when I try to lose my weight. I always do some work out in there.

✓ Frankly speaking, I don't enjoy going to the park anymore, but I do visit parks occasionally, especially when I try to lose weight. I always do some workouts there.

'Park' needs the definite article 'the' when speaking generally about the park you used to go to, and 'visit park' should be plural or 'the park'. 'Lose my weight' is unnatural; use 'lose weight' without 'my'. 'Work out' as a noun should be 'workouts' or use the verb form 'work out'; 'in there' is incorrect — use 'there'. Suggestions: add 'the' where appropriate, use plural nouns for general visits, remove unnecessary possessive, and choose correct noun/verb forms and adverb placement.

× Yes definitely, there is a big park near my city but is little bit far away from my home so I always hope to have a new park near my city.

✓ Yes, definitely, there is a big park near my city, but it is a little bit far from my home, so I always hope to have a new park closer to my home.

Missing subject 'it' after 'but' causes a sentence fragment; use 'it is' for clarity. 'Little bit' needs 'a' before it. 'Far away from my home' is acceptable but 'far from my home' is more natural; 'near my city' vs 'near my home' inconsistent — clarify as 'closer to my home'. Suggestion: include the subject 'it', add the article 'a', and rephrase for natural word order and clarity.

× Since I've never been to Park in Seoul, I would like to go to. To park in Seoul because there are a lot of beautiful park. Therefore I would like to walk around there.

✓ Since I've never been to a park in Seoul, I would like to go because there are a lot of beautiful parks there. Therefore I would like to walk around them.

'Park in Seoul' needs an article: use 'a park' for one of many. Sentence fragments 'I would like to go to.' and 'To park in Seoul because...' must be combined into a single sentence. 'A lot of beautiful park' requires plural 'parks'. Replace vague 'there' placement: 'parks there' and refer back with 'them' for parks. Suggestion: add appropriate articles, combine fragments into coherent sentences, pluralize countable nouns, and use clear pronoun references.