Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 구문 시제와 단수·복수 일치, 자연스러운 연결 표현을 고쳐야 합니다. 예를 들어 과거 사실을 말할 때는 과거형을 사용해야 하고(replaced: 'I loved' 등), 이유를 말할 때는 한두 문장으로 간결히 연결하면 더 자연스럽습니다. 또한 동일한 표현(‘I love’)을 반복하기보다 유의어를 사용해 다양성을 늘리세요. 구체적인 경험(무엇을 했는지, 누구와 함께였는지) 한두 가지를 덧붙이면 답변이 더 풍부해집니다.

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park near my house when I was a child because it helped me relax after school. For example, I often played football with my friends there every weekend, which always made me happy.

제안: 표현을 간결하고 자연스럽게 정리하세요. 빈번한 반복(‘I still like…’, ‘I love…’)을 줄이고, 연결어(for example, because, so)와 구체적 활동을 추가하면 더 설득력 있습니다. 또한 'in the daily life' 대신 자연스러운 표현('in my daily routine' 등)을 사용하세요.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy visiting the park near my home because it helps me unwind after work. For example, I usually take a 20-minute walk there in the evening and sometimes read a book on a bench.

제안: 문장 구성과 논리적 연결을 명확하게 하세요. 감정 표현('I'm upset of it')은 부자연스럽고 의미가 분명하지 않으므로 'I wish there were more parks'처럼 표현하세요. 이유는 간결하게 제시하고 중복된 표현을 피하며, 가능한 한 구체적 예(더 넓은 트랙, 다양한 시설 등)를 제시하면 좋습니다.

예시: Yes, I wish there were more parks in my city because the only nearby park is quite small. If there were larger parks with running tracks and green areas, I could exercise or relax more comfortably.

제안: 시제와 문법(‘there have’ → ‘there are’)을 수정하고, 과거와 미래 시제를 혼동하지 마세요. 또한 개인 경험을 말할 때는 사실에 맞게 표현하세요(예: 'I would like to visit Central Park' and 'I imagine reading a book under a tree' 또는 'I once read a book in a similar park'). 문장을 더 명확히 하고 구체적 활동을 덧붙이세요.

예시: Yes, I'd love to visit Central Park in the US because there are many trees and benches where I could relax. I imagine myself reading a book under a big tree and taking a long walk along the paths.

× Oh yes, when I was young I love to go to the park near my house.

✓ Oh yes, when I was young I loved to go to the park near my house.

Tense consistency error: the sentence starts with a past-time marker 'when I was young', so the main verb should be in the past tense 'loved' not present 'love'. Use past tense to keep time reference consistent. Suggestion: change 'love' to 'loved' when referring to past habitual actions.

× It makes me feel relaxed and less exhausted, so I love it.

✓ It made me feel relaxed and less exhausted, so I loved it.

Tense inconsistency: continuing to describe childhood experiences requires past tense 'made' and 'loved'. Using present tense verbs conflicts with the past time frame. Suggestion: use past tense verbs when describing past feelings or reactions.

× Yeah, I still like going to the park near my home.

✓ Yeah, I still like going to the park near my home.

This sentence is correct. Present tense 'still like' appropriately describes a current habit. No change needed.

× It always makes me feel relaxed, so I love the time when I go to the park in the daily life.

✓ It always makes me feel relaxed, so I enjoy the times when I go to the park in my daily life.

Word choice and noun number: 'love the time' is unnatural; use 'enjoy the times' or 'love going' and 'in the daily life' should be 'in my daily life'. Also keep present simple 'always makes' consistent. 'Times' is plural to match habitual visits. Suggestion: replace 'love the time' with 'enjoy the times' and 'in the daily life' with 'in my daily life'.

× Oh yes there is one park near my house so I'm upset of it because I want to run or walk another park because it make me feel more comfortable.

✓ Oh yes, there is only one park near my house, so I'm upset about it because I want to run or walk in another park; it makes me feel more comfortable.

Preposition and article errors: use 'upset about' not 'upset of'. Use 'only one park' if meaning limitation. To indicate exercising inside a park, use 'in another park'. Subject-verb agreement: 'it makes' not 'it make'. Punctuation and sentence structure improvements help clarity. Suggestion: use 'upset about', 'in another park', and correct verb to 'makes'.

× Oh yes, in the future I want to go to the Central Park in US because there have a lot of trees and benches.

✓ Oh yes, in the future I want to go to Central Park in the US because there are a lot of trees and benches.

Use of 'there be': with plural noun 'a lot of trees and benches' the correct form is 'there are' not 'there have'. Also include definite article 'the US' and drop 'the' before park name or use 'Central Park' without 'the' depending on style; commonly 'Central Park in the US' is used. Suggestion: use 'there are' for existence of plural items and 'the US' for the country.

× I went to reading a book near the tree.

✓ I sat and read a book under a tree.

Incorrect verb pattern: 'went to reading' is ungrammatical. Use 'went to + verb' requires base verb (e.g., 'went to read') but more natural is 'sat and read' or 'read a book' to describe the past action. Also use 'under a tree' rather than 'near the tree' for naturalness, and 'a tree' unless a specific tree was previously mentioned. Suggestion: say 'I read a book under a tree' or 'I went to read a book under a tree' depending on intended nuance.