Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be clear, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Correct common mistakes (bath → park?; pay spot/lighting my bicycle unclear). Use linking words like 'because' or 'for example' to connect ideas.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because my family often spent weekends there. For example, I used to ride my bicycle with my brother and play on the swings, which made those weekends very fun.

제안: Answer directly and fix grammatical errors (to going to bed → going to parks; play some time → I sometimes go). Give one specific reason and one example; use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example'. Keep it within 1–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they are quiet and relaxing. For example, I often go there to run or do light exercises in the morning.

제안: Provide a clear topic sentence and specific reasons with correct vocabulary (part→parks, pairs→places). Use linking words like 'because' or 'and' to connect reasons. Mention one concrete benefit or example to strengthen the answer.

예시: Yes, definitely. I think more small parks would give people more places to relax and socialize, and they would also help make the city cleaner and greener by increasing tree cover.

제안: Be concise and correct grammar and word choice. Start with a direct answer, name the park, and give a specific reason. Avoid filler words and unclear phrasing (write→want, park soccer→park, Linux→relax). Use linking words like 'because' to explain why.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Lumpini Park in Bangkok because it is a famous park with lots of greenery. I think it would be a great place to relax and spend time outdoors.

× 'I always went to bath with my brother on weekends.'

✓ 'I always went to the bath with my brother on weekends.'

'bath' is countable here and needs an article; use 'the bath' or better 'take a bath' -> 'I always took a bath with my brother on weekends.' Suggestion: use correct collocation 'take a bath' and past tense of 'take'. Note: This sentence also involves a past tense verb that should be changed to 'took' for accuracy (see ID 5), but primary issue addressed here is singular/plural/article with 'bath'.

× 'I enjoy staying outside so as a pay spot and lighting my bicycle.'

✓ 'I enjoy staying outside, playing in parks, and riding my bicycle.'

'so as a pay spot and lighting my bicycle' is ungrammatical. The verb 'enjoy' is followed by gerunds (-ing forms). Use correct verbs and collocations: 'playing in parks' and 'riding my bicycle'. Also fix word choices ('pay spot' -> 'parks') and punctuation.

× 'I like to going to bed because they are quiet and relaxing.'

✓ 'I like going to parks because they are quiet and relaxing.'

'like to going' mixes infinitive and gerund forms. Use either 'like to go' or 'like going'. Also 'bed' is incorrect word choice; 'parks' fits the context. Subject 'they' correctly refers to parks.

× 'Play some time going there to run or exercise.'

✓ 'Sometimes I go there to run or exercise.'

'Play some time going there to run or exercise' has incorrect word order and verb choice. Correct structure: adverb 'Sometimes' + subject 'I' + verb 'go' + purpose 'to run or exercise'.

× 'I think small part would give people more pairs to enjoy and relax.'

✓ 'I think small parks would give people more places to enjoy and relax.'

'part' should be 'parks' (plural). 'pairs' is a misspelling of 'places'. Use plural to match 'people' and context.

× 'They can also make a the city cleaner and greener.'

✓ 'They can also make the city cleaner and greener.'

Both indefinite and definite articles 'a the' were used erroneously. Use the definite article 'the' before 'city' when referring to a specific city.

× 'I write to visit the some famous park soccer in Thailand they call Lumpini Park because I am enjoy nature.'

✓ 'I would like to visit the famous park in Thailand called Lumpini Park because I enjoy nature.'

Multiple tense and wording errors: 'I write to visit' should be 'I would like to visit' (future intention). 'the some' -> 'the' or 'some'; use 'the famous park' here. 'park soccer' is incorrect; likely 'park' only. 'they call Lumpini Park' should be 'called Lumpini Park'. 'I am enjoy' mixes 'am' with verb; use 'I enjoy'. These corrections align tense and grammar.

× 'I think you would would be great way to Linux and spend more time outdoor.'

✓ 'I think it would be a great way to relax and spend more time outdoors.'

'you would would' has duplicated modal; 'Linux' is wrong word choice for 'relax'. Use 'it would be a great way to relax'. 'outdoor' should be the adverb 'outdoors'. Ensure correct modal usage and word choice.