Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cümle yapınızı düzeltin ve zamanı tutarlı kullanın. Kısa ve doğal bir konu cümlesiyle başlayın, ardından iki kısa detay verin. Bağlaçlar (because, so, and) kullanarak akışı sağlayın. Telaffuz ve tekrar eden dolgu kelimelerini (uh, um) azaltmaya çalışın.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because I was very energetic and enjoyed running around. I often played games with other children there, and those visits made me feel happy and free.

제안: Olumsuz cevabınızı daha kibar ve açıklayıcı yapın; kısa bir konu cümlesi kurun ve nedenini açık bir sebeple destekleyin. 'look my phone' yerine doğru fiil ve yapı kullanın (check my phone / spend time on my phone).

예시: Not really; nowadays I usually prefer checking my phone when I have free time because I follow social media and messages. However, I sometimes visit a park when I want fresh air.

제안: Cümlede yanlış kelime kullanımlarını düzeltin (sea → city) ve daha net bir yapı kurun: konu cümlesi + neden (örneklerle). Tekrarlardan kaçının ve detayları kısa cümlelerle verin.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they bring people together. For example, watching children play reminds me of my childhood, which creates a warm and friendly atmosphere.

제안: Genel bir ret yerine daha açıklayıcı olun; gelecekle ilgili fikir verirken uygun zaman kullanın (will be / am going to be). Ayrıca gelecekte parkları ziyaret etme olasılığını tamamen kapatmayın; alternatif bir neden veya koşul ekleyin.

예시: I don't have any specific parks in mind right now because I expect to be busy as an adult. However, I might visit parks occasionally if I have free time or want to relax.

× When I was a child, I like to go, I like to going park, uh, because I am very energetic, uh, child.

✓ When I was a child, I liked to go to parks because I was a very energetic child.

The student uses present tense 'like' and 'am' while referring to past time 'When I was a child'. Change verbs to past tense 'liked' and 'was'. Also correct form 'go to parks' (use 'to' and plural) and remove redundant words. Suggestion: use past simple consistently for past habits and use 'go to parks' or 'go to the park' depending on singular/plural intent.

× No, because, uh, nowadays I just look my phone.

✓ No, because these days I just look at my phone.

The phrase 'nowadays' (present time) is fine but 'look my phone' is incorrect: English requires the preposition 'at' with 'look' when referring to objects. Also 'nowadays' better replaced by 'these days' in casual speech. Suggestion: use 'look at' or 'check' the phone.

× I like to see more parks in my sea because when I see one park and in the park, a lot of a lot of children play some games and my memory and my old memories come back to my brain.

✓ I would like to see more parks in my city because when I see a park with many children playing games, my old memories come back to me.

Multiple errors: 'see more parks in my sea' uses wrong noun; likely 'city' not 'sea'. 'I like to see' is acceptable but 'I would like to see' fits the question about desire. 'See one park and in the park' is redundant; streamline to 'see a park'. 'A lot of a lot of' is repetitive; use 'many'. 'Play some games' is okay as 'playing games'. 'My memory and my old memories come back to my brain' is wordy; idiomatic: 'my old memories come back to me'. Also change 'to my brain' to 'to me'. Suggestion: check prepositions and common collocations like 'in my city', 'come back to me'.

× No, I don't think so, because in the future I'm going to be adult.

✓ No, I don't think so, because in the future I'm going to be an adult.

Missing indefinite article 'an' before 'adult'. With 'going to be' correct future form is fine. Suggestion: include appropriate articles before countable nouns: 'an adult'. Also the clause 'I don't think so' is fine; you could also say 'I don't think so because I'll be an adult'.