Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Sửa ngữ pháp, từ vựng và sắp xếp câu cho rõ ràng, tránh từ sai (ví dụ 'box' nên là 'park') và loại bỏ câu thừa. Nên bắt đầu bằng câu chủ đề trực tiếp, sau đó thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể với liên từ phù hợp.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. I enjoyed walking and playing on the playground, especially swinging with my friends. For example, we often had picnics and took turns on the swings, which was always fun.

제안: Cải thiện ngữ pháp và trật tự từ, dùng cụm từ chính xác (ví dụ 'it trends will and benefits' là không đúng). Dùng liên từ để nối ý và cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về tần suất hoặc hoạt động bạn làm ở công viên.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often visit them to unwind and get fresh air because they are beneficial for my health. Sometimes I also meet friends there to catch up or work on projects together.

제안: Cải thiện số ít/ số nhiều và các cấu trúc danh từ (ví dụ 'more park' → 'more parks'; 'SIM simply' là lỗi). Thêm liên từ để liệt kê hoạt động rõ ràng và chính xác hơn về lợi ích cụ thể.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they are peaceful, healthy places that help people relax and exercise. For example, I could go jogging there, meet friends on weekends, or simply enjoy some quiet time outdoors to improve my mental well-being.

제안: Rà soát lại từ vựng và tránh lỗi phát âm/viết gây hiểu lầm (ví dụ 'PE perfect', lặp từ, câu cuối khó hiểu). Trả lời rõ ràng: nêu tên nơi, lý do cụ thể và một hoạt động bạn muốn làm ở đó; dùng 2–3 câu ngắn gọn, mạch lạc.

예시: In the future, I would like to visit Disneyland because it is a perfect place to have fun with friends and family. I want to try the famous rides and watch the parade, which I have heard is spectacular.

× Yes, I like going to the box.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks.

The student is speaking about childhood (past), so present tense 'like' is incorrect; use past tense 'liked'. Also 'the box' is incorrect noun choice and 'parks' (plural) matches the question. Suggestion: use 'liked' for past habitual actions and appropriate noun 'parks'.

× I'll try because I enjoy walking and play in the playground.

✓ I used to go because I enjoyed walking and playing in the playground.

After 'enjoy' the verb should be in -ing form ('playing'). Also the context refers to childhood, so change tense to past: 'enjoyed'. 'I'll try' is inappropriate for past; use 'I used to go' or 'I went'.

× For example, I often when there with my friends to be on the swings and have a picnic.

✓ For example, I often went there with my friends to be on the swings and have a picnic.

The sentence is missing proper verb placement; 'when' is unnecessary. Use past tense 'went' to match childhood context and a clear structure: 'I often went there with my friends to play on the swings and have a picnic.'

× Well yes, I still like going to park.

✓ Well yes, I still like going to parks.

When speaking generally about going to such places, use plural 'parks' or include an article: 'the park' or 'a park'. 'Going to park' is ungrammatical. Present tense 'still like' is correct for current habit.

× I go there to unwind and get some fresh air because it trends will and benefits go for my health and sometime I meet my friends there to catch up or work on project together.

✓ I go there to unwind and get some fresh air because it is good for my health, and sometimes I meet my friends there to catch up or work on a project together.

Multiple issues: 'it trends will and benefits go for my health' is garbled—use 'it is good for my health'. 'sometime' should be 'sometimes'. 'work on project' needs an article: 'a project'. These corrections align verbs and articles properly.

× Yes I would, I'd like to see more park in my city because they are peaceful, healthy place that help people relax and exercise.

✓ Yes I would. I'd like to see more parks in my city because they are peaceful, healthy places that help people relax and exercise.

'More park' should be plural 'more parks'. 'Place' should be plural 'places' to match 'they'. Subject-verb agreement: 'places that help' is correct. Also add punctuation for clarity.

× For example, I could go jogging there, meet friends on weekends or SIM simply enjoy some quiet time outdoor to improve my mental well-being.

✓ For example, I could go jogging there, meet friends on weekends, or simply enjoy some quiet time outdoors to improve my mental well-being.

Remove 'SIM' (nonsense) and use parallel verb forms. 'outdoor' should be the adverb 'outdoors'. Add commas for coordination.

× In the future I want to go Disneyland because it is a PE perfect place to have fun and relax with friends or family.

✓ In the future I want to go to Disneyland because it is a perfect place to have fun and relax with friends or family.

Add preposition 'to' before 'Disneyland'. Remove 'PE' (extraneous). The rest is correct; use present tense 'is' because the place's quality is general.

× I'd like to try the famous right? What's the parade in the Rizal in in especially the sea the.

✓ I'd like to see the famous parade in Rizal, especially the sea-themed floats.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains repetitions ('in in') and unclear words. 'Try the famous' is vague—use 'see the famous parade'. Clarify 'Rizal' as location and specify 'sea-themed floats' if intended. Ensure sentence structure is coherent.