Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more coherent and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and avoid repetition. Keep answer to 1–3 concise sentences and be specific about activities. Use linking words if adding details.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks when I was a child. I enjoyed playing on the swings and running around with my friends because there was lots of open space and playground equipment.

제안: Give a direct clear response then explain briefly with specific reasons. Avoid unclear phrases and repetition; use linking words (because, so) to connect ideas. Keep within 1–3 sentences.

예시: Not really. I find parks too noisy now because I prefer quiet places to relax, so I usually choose a cafe or a calm garden instead.

제안: Answer clearly: state your position and give concise reasons with precise vocabulary. Avoid contradictory phrases like 'like but don't enjoy'—clarify whether you support more parks and why. Use linking words (however, because) and correct word forms.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in the city because they make urban areas more attractive and provide comfortable public spaces for residents to relax and exercise.

제안: Respond with a clear statement about a specific park and give a brief reason and plan. Use correct tense and word choice, avoid unclear phrases like 'belonged with my sister'. Keep it to 1–3 sentences and include linking words (because, so, next week).

예시: Yes. My sister and I plan to visit Aqua Park near our neighborhood this summer because the weather is extremely hot and it will be a fun way to cool off.

× Yes, I did when I was a child. I love. Love going to bars and enjoying playing many a place and run around the park.

✓ Yes, I did when I was a child. I loved going to parks and enjoyed playing in many places and running around the park.

The student mixed past and present tenses. The question asks about childhood (past), so verbs should be in past tense (loved, enjoyed, running as gerund after 'enjoyed'). 'Love. Love going to bars' is fragmented and 'bars' is incorrect; context is 'parks'. Use 'running' for correct gerund form after 'enjoyed'. Also 'many a place' is ungrammatical here; use 'many places'. Suggestion: keep past tense consistent and use correct gerund forms and plural nouns.

× No, I don't because I feel I am bigger than going to bugs and playing and I feel it's something noisy for me. I love to go to relaxing, relaxing.

✓ No, I don't now because I feel I am too old to go to parks and play; I find them noisy. I prefer to relax.

The student used present tense but with incorrect words and structures. 'Bigger than going to bugs' is wrong; likely meaning 'too old' and 'bugs' should be 'parks'. Use 'too old to' + base verb for ability/appropriateness. 'I love to go to relaxing, relaxing' is ungrammatical; express preference with 'I prefer to relax.' Suggestion: use 'too old to' for age-related inability and use clear verbs for preferences.

× Yes, I would like to see them but don't enjoy them.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks, but I don't enjoy them.

Missing subject 'I' before 'don't' and incomplete reference 'see them' should be 'see more parks' to match the question. Modal 'would like' is correct. Ensure full clause with subject and object. Suggestion: include explicit subject and clarify object.

× I see them as something fashionable, something flourish, flourish and add the sense of beautiful the city to the city and make it more comfortable to see it.

✓ I see them as fashionable and flourishing; they add beauty to the city and make it more pleasant to visit.

Incorrect adjective/adverb forms: 'flourish' is the verb; use adjective 'flourishing'. 'Add the sense of beautiful the city to the city' is ungrammatical; use 'add beauty to the city'. 'Make it more comfortable to see it' should be 'make it more pleasant to visit'. Suggestion: use correct adjective forms and concise noun phrases ('add beauty').

× Yes, I belonged with my sister to visit Aqua Bark near from us here in our neighborhood because this summer nowadays is something unbelievable.

✓ Yes, my sister and I planned to visit Aqua Park near our neighborhood because this summer has been incredibly hot.

'Belonged with my sister to visit' is incorrect; use 'my sister and I planned to visit' or 'I planned to visit with my sister'. 'Aqua Bark' likely 'Aqua Park'. 'Near from us here' is wrong; use 'near our neighborhood' or 'near us'. 'This summer nowadays is something unbelievable' should be 'this summer has been incredibly hot' or 'has been unbelievable.' Suggestion: use correct past tense verbs for plans and correct prepositional phrases ('near our neighborhood').

× It is so hot. So I decided to go.

✓ It is so hot, so I decided to go.

Grammar is mostly fine but sentence punctuation/flow needed combining for clarity. 'It is so hot' (present) sets reason; 'I decided to go' (past) is acceptable if decision was already made. Alternatively, use 'I will go' if referring to a future plan. Suggestion: choose consistent tense: 'It is so hot, so I decided to go' (decision made) or 'It is so hot, so I will go' (future intention).