Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve grammar and sentence structure: use past tense consistently, remove fillers (uh), and make the response concise with one topic sentence plus one supporting detail. Add a linking word if needed.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child because there were slides that I enjoyed a lot with my friends. We spent hours playing together, which made those visits fun and memorable.

제안: Use correct tense and clearer contrast language. Start with a direct topic sentence, then add a linking word (but/now) to contrast past and present and give a specific example (yoga, quiet).

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. Whereas I used to play on the swings as a child, now I go early in the morning to practice yoga and enjoy the peace and fresh air.

제안: Be more specific and avoid repetition and fillers. Provide one clear reason then expand with a concrete effect or example, using linking words like 'and' or 'also' correctly.

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would improve air quality and lower urban temperatures, and they would also provide pleasant green spaces where people can relax and exercise.

제안: Make sentences fluent and avoid repetition. Use conditional phrasing correctly and provide one specific reason why you want to visit (scenery, facilities). Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit Sukhna Lake in Chandigarh because I have read many articles praising its scenic promenade and birdlife. If I get the opportunity, I will definitely go to explore the lake and take photographs.

× Yes, when I am a child I prefer to go in the park because uh, there was a slides which I enjoy a lot with my friends.

✓ Yes, when I was a child I preferred to go to the park because there were slides that I enjoyed a lot with my friends.

Uses past context 'as a child' so past tense should be used (was, preferred, enjoyed). 'Go in the park' is incorrect preposition — use 'go to the park'. 'There was a slides' has number and verb agreement errors: use plural 'there were slides' or 'there was a slide'. Replace 'which' with 'that' or use 'which' with a comma; here 'that' is more natural. Explanation: change verbs to past tense, fix subject-verb agreement and preposition; suggestion: use past tense consistently and match singular/plural (e.g., 'there were slides').

× Yes, I'll prefer to go parks till now because when I'm a child I go for swings but now I go for peace and doing yoga sometimes in early morning so I prefer to go in the park.

✓ Yes, I still prefer to go to parks because when I was a child I went on the swings, but now I go for peace and sometimes do yoga early in the morning, so I prefer to go to the park.

Mixed tenses and incorrect modal: 'I'll prefer' is wrong for habitual present — use 'I prefer' or 'I still prefer'. 'Go parks' needs preposition 'go to parks'. 'When I'm a child' should be past: 'when I was a child'. 'I go for swings' should be 'I went on the swings' (past and correct preposition). 'Doing yoga' should be 'do yoga' to match subject and tense. 'In early morning' needs article/word order: 'early in the morning'. Maintain consistent tense and correct prepositions. Suggestion: keep present for current habits and past for childhood, use 'go to' for places and 'go on' for swings.

× Yes, because it would increase the oxygen level of my city, Uh, also provide uh, some coolness to my city.

✓ Yes, because it would increase the oxygen level of my city and also provide some cooling for my city.

Sentence structure: repetition 'to my city' is awkward; combine clauses with 'and'. 'Provide some coolness' is unnatural — use 'provide some cooling' or 'make the city cooler'. Modal 'would' is acceptable for hypothetical future improvements. Suggestion: use natural collocations ('provide cooling' or 'make the city cooler') and combine related ideas with conjunctions.

× I want to go Sukhna Lake which is in Chandigarh.

✓ I want to go to Sukhna Lake, which is in Chandigarh.

'Go' requires the preposition 'to' before a place: 'go to Sukhna Lake'. Also a comma before the nonrestrictive clause 'which is in Chandigarh' improves clarity. Suggestion: use 'go to' for places and punctuate nonrestrictive clauses.

× I want to explore that park because I read many articles about that park.

✓ I want to explore that park because I have read many articles about it.

Tense: 'read' (pronounced 'red') suggests simple past; better to use present perfect 'have read' to show past reading relevant to present desire. Repeating 'that park' is redundant; use pronoun 'it'. Suggestion: use present perfect for past experiences with present relevance and avoid repetition.

× So I if I got opportunity then I will definitely visit that park.

✓ So if I get the opportunity, I will definitely visit that park.

Mixed conditional/time forms: use 'if I get the opportunity' (present simple in first conditional) with 'I will' for future result. 'I got opportunity' is past simple and incorrect here. Add article 'the' before 'opportunity'. Suggestion: use first conditional for likely future events: 'If I get the opportunity, I will...'.