Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体可以理解，但需要改进时态一致性、语法和连贯性。例如：‘I like’应改为过去时‘I liked’；‘went to park’缺定冠词，应为‘went to the park’；最后一句时态混杂且可用连接词使表达更自然。建议将回答控制在2–4句，首句直接回答，随后用具体细节扩展并用连接词衔接。

예시: Yes, I loved going to the park as a child. I usually went there with my family after dinner, and we would chat about our day while walking around. These evenings were relaxing and a nice chance to bond.

제안: 回答意图明确，但存在语法和用词不当。如‘to park’应为‘to the park’；‘after a stressful study’不自然，可改为‘after a stressful study session’或‘when I’m stressed from studying’。建议用连接词（for example, and, so）使句子更流畅，并提供更具体场景以增加内容。

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to the park, especially after a long study session. For example, on weekends I often go with friends to relax and discuss our coursework, which helps me relieve stress.

제안: 观点清楚但表达重复且语法错误多。应避免重复短语（如‘to to breathe some fresh’），改正搭配（‘breathe fresh air’）。可用连接词列举原因，并尽量用更地道的表达，如‘it would be beneficial for people’s health and local wildlife’。注意句子简洁，不超过五句。

예시: Yes, I would. More parks would be beneficial for people’s health because they provide places to relax and breathe fresh air, and they also support local wildlife by offering natural habitats.

제안: 回答含义可理解但语法和表达不自然。应修正‘go to visit’冗余为‘visit’；‘besides the sea’不清晰，可改为‘near the sea’；注意人称和动词形式（‘I'm really want’应为‘I really want’或‘I’d really like’），最后用非限定动词‘to enjoy’替换‘to enjoying’。建议提供1–2个具体想去的公园或原因以丰富内容。

예시: Yes, I’d like to visit many parks in the future, especially coastal parks in China that offer beautiful sea views. For instance, I hope to visit a seaside park where I can relax, take photos, and enjoy the scenery.

× Of course, I like to go to parks.

✓ Of course, I liked going to parks.

学生在回答有关童年（过去）的喜好时，原句使用一般现在时“like”与上下文时态不一致。应该使用过去时或过去习惯表达（liked / liked to go / used to go）。建议用“liked”或“used to like”来表示过去经常性的动作。

× When I was little, I usually went to park with my family members.

✓ When I was little, I usually went to the park with my family members.

英文中表示特定场所通常需要定冠词“the”。“go to park”是不正确的搭配，正确是“go to the park”。建议记住固定搭配：go to the + 场所或去公园时说“the park”。

× After dinner, we have a short chat and share something interesting in our daily life.

✓ After dinner, we had a short chat and shared something interesting from our daily life.

句子描述的是过去习惯（童年时的活动），应使用过去时“had”与“shared”，并且“share something interesting in our daily life”在表达上更自然为“shared something from our daily life”。建议根据时间状语（When I was little）统一使用过去时。

× Of course, I still like to go to park now, especially after a stressful study, and on weekends I usually go there with my friends to share our daily life and talk about our study.

✓ Of course, I still like to go to the park now, especially after stressful study, and on weekends I usually go there with my friends to share our daily lives and talk about our studies.

同样“go to park”缺少定冠词“the”。另外，“a stressful study”表述不自然，去掉不定冠词或改为“stressful studying/study”更合适；“daily life”应复数形式“daily lives”表示每个人的日常；“our study”应为复数“our studies”表示各自的学业。建议注意冠词和可数名词单复数的一致性。

× I think it benefits to people to relax themselves to to breathe some fresh, to breathe fresh air and also benefits to wildlife to live there.

✓ I think it benefits people by helping them relax and breathe fresh air, and it also benefits wildlife by providing a place to live.

原句结构混乱且使用了不正确的介词和动词形式（例如“benefits to people”应为“benefits people”；重复“to”且“breathe some fresh”不正确）。需要改为动名词短语“helping them relax and breathe”或使用“by”引出方式，同时“benefits to wildlife to live there”应改为“benefits wildlife by providing a place to live”。建议学习常见搭配：benefit sb / benefit from sth；用“help sb do”或“help sb to do”。

× Yes, there are many parks I want to go to visit in the future.

✓ Yes, there are many parks I want to visit in the future.

“go to visit”重复冗余，英语中通常直接说“visit”或“go to”。因此删除“go to”。建议简化动词短语避免重复。

× In China there are many parks besides the sea and you can see the appealing view in the park, so I'm really want to go there to enjoying the time.

✓ In China there are many parks by the sea where you can see appealing views, so I really want to go there to enjoy my time.

多个问题：1) “besides the sea”用法不当，应为“by the sea”或“near the sea”；2) “appealing view”复数更合适“appealing views”；3) “I'm really want”动词重复，正确为“I really want”；4) “to enjoying”非谓语形式错误，应为“不定式 to enjoy”。建议注意介词搭配、单复数以及不定式/动名词的正确使用。