Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答较自然且信息相关，但句子较长且有重复（例如“with my parents and friends”两次出现的含义重叠）。可用更简洁的主题句并用一两句具体细节支持，注意句子长度不超过五句，避免语法小错误如时态和连词使用。建议在细节中加入具体场景或活动（如荡秋千、野餐），并用连接词如“for example”或“one time”使结构更连贯。

예시: Yes — I loved going to parks as a child because I enjoyed playing outdoors with my parents and friends. For example, we often had picnics near the pond and my friends and I would play on the swings and slides. Those afternoons were relaxing and gave me a chance to spend quality time with family.

제안: 回答直接但有几处不自然用语（如“From the outset”不适合此处，“go parks”缺少介词）。内容可以更具体地说明原因并提供例子，例如提到具体的学业压力或独处的活动。此外可加入一句正反对比（以前 vs 现在）以增强内容层次。请简化句子并修正介词和连接词。

예시: Not really — I hardly go to parks these days because I prefer to spend time alone and I often have heavy coursework. For example, I usually study in the evenings and meet friends only on weekends, so there is little chance for a park visit. Occasionally I go for a short walk nearby, but not to big parks.

제안: 回答观点明确但有语法和用词问题（如“People's Daily lives”、“parts”应为“parks”或“areas”）。细节可以更具体，例如说明增加公园的具体好处（儿童活动、运动空间、空气质量改善）。使用连接词（for example, moreover）并注意大小写与名词形式。

예시: Yes — I would like more parks in my city because they improve residents' daily lives and the urban environment. For example, parks provide safe spaces for children to play and for people to exercise, which helps reduce stress. Moreover, more green areas can improve air quality and make the city look more attractive.

제안: 回答清楚且有具体目的地，但有些表达可以更自然（例如说“I've seen many videos on TikTok”而非“always watch the videos on Tiktok about it”）。可以补充更具体的期望活动（如徒步、拍照、看日出）来丰富内容，并注意拼写和大小写（TikTok）。

예시: Yes — I would love to visit Huangshan National Forest Park in China because I have seen many stunning videos of its landscapes on TikTok. For example, I want to hike the famous trails, take photos of the pine-covered peaks, and experience the misty sunrise in person.

× For instance, my parents always brought me to play in parks near my home with my friends and we also had dinner together outside.

✓ For instance, my parents always brought me to play in parks near my home with my friends, and we also had dinner outside.

原句中連接兩個並列分句時缺少連詞或標點，使句子讀起來不流暢。此處添加連詞 "and" 並在前半部分後加逗號可以清楚地連接兩個動作，保持主謂一致。建議在複合句中使用正確連詞與標點。

× To be honest, I hardly ever go to parks now.

✓ To be honest, I hardly ever go to parks now.

此句時態使用基本正確（現在時表示習慣）。僅提醒：若想更口語可說 "I hardly ever go to the park these days." 但原句已符合語法。

× On top of that, my parents and friends are busy now, so I rarely invite them to go parks together.

✓ On top of that, my parents and friends are busy now, so I rarely invite them to go to parks together.

動詞短語 "go to (a place)" 需要介詞 "to"，原句缺少介詞導致不完整。建議使用 "go to parks" 或更自然的 "go to the park"。

× Parks are important not only in appearance of cities but also People's Daily lives.

✓ Parks are important not only for the appearance of cities but also for people's daily lives.

原句在表達目的或關係時介詞使用錯誤且名詞所有格和大小寫不當。應使用介詞短語 "for the appearance" 來說明重要性，並將 "People's Daily lives" 更正為小寫且結構為 "people's daily lives"。

× For instance, people can go for a walk in parks in order to relieve their pressure of studying and working.

✓ For instance, people can go for a walk in parks in order to relieve the pressure of studying and working.

此處應使用定冠詞 "the pressure" 來指代特定的壓力。另可將 "pressure of studying and working" 改為更自然的表達 "pressure from studying and working"。

× What's more, beautiful parts can improve the city's appearance efficiently.

✓ What's more, beautiful parks can improve the city's appearance effectively.

原句 "beautiful parts" 應為 "beautiful parks"（詞彙錯誤），且副詞 "efficiently" 用於此處不如 "effectively" 或 "visually" 自然。建議改為 "beautiful parks" 並用更自然的副詞。

× This is mainly because I always watch the videos on Tiktok about it and it is really attractive.

✓ This is mainly because I always watch videos on TikTok about it, and it is really attractive.

句中時態整體可接受，但需要小修：去掉定冠詞 "the videos" 改為一般複數 "videos" 比較自然；且專有名詞 "TikTok" 首字母大寫。句子連接處加入逗號和連詞讓結構更清晰。

× On top of that, I want to feel the nature and the environment personally.

✓ On top of that, I want to experience nature and the environment personally.

動詞 "feel" 用於 "nature and the environment" 不太自然，改為 "experience" 更貼切。去掉定冠詞 "the" 在 "nature" 前更常見。時態無誤，但用詞需自然化。