Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Make the response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid grammar mistakes (e.g., verb tense and articles) and redundancy.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My friends and I often played on the swings and slides, and we sometimes shared snacks on the grass. Those visits were fun because we could run around freely and explore the playground together.

제안: Begin with a direct topic sentence and use smoother phrasing and linking words. Correct small grammar issues (article use and word order) and give one concrete example of what you do there.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks because they relax me and lift my mood. For example, I often meditate under a tree and take a short walk to enjoy the natural scenery, which helps me destress after a busy day.

제안: Make the answer grammatically correct and more specific. State the main idea clearly, then support it with one or two specific reasons using linking words. Avoid unfinished sentences and vague phrases.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks in my city because they improve air quality and provide places for people to relax. For instance, more small parks near residential areas would allow workers to exercise or unwind in the evenings.

제안: Start with a direct answer, then give a clear, specific reason and avoid repeating the same phrase. Use correct adjectives and article usage and provide a small detail about what you want to see or do there.

예시: Yes, I would love to visit the parks in London in the future because they are well maintained and very spacious. For example, I would like to walk through Hyde Park and visit the Serpentine to enjoy the gardens and historical monuments.

× We usually play and also take swings and slides.

✓ We usually played and also used the swings and slides.

The question asks about childhood activities (past context 'as a child'), so verbs should be in the past tense. Change 'play' to 'played' and use 'used the swings and slides' to show past habitual action. Suggestion: Use past simple for repeated actions in the past (e.g., 'We often played on the swings and slides').

× Moreover, we also enjoy snacks and food at park.

✓ Moreover, we also enjoyed snacks and food at the park.

Again, the context is past, so 'enjoy' should be 'enjoyed'. Also, 'park' requires the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific place known in context. Use past tense for consistency. Suggestion: Use 'the park' and past tense: 'we enjoyed snacks at the park.'

× Yes, I still like going to parks nowadays because it makes my mood good and also keeps me relaxed and calm.

✓ Yes, I still like going to parks nowadays because they improve my mood and keep me relaxed and calm.

Plural subject 'parks' requires plural verb/pronoun agreement: use 'they' instead of 'it'. 'Makes my mood good' is awkward; replace with 'improve my mood'. Keep present simple for habitual actions. Suggestion: Use correct subject-pronoun agreement and natural collocations: 'they improve my mood.'

× I usually do meditation when I am at park and enjoy the natural beauty and scenery.

✓ I usually meditate when I am at the park and enjoy the natural beauty and scenery.

Use 'meditate' rather than 'do meditation' for natural phrasing. 'At park' requires the definite article 'the'. Keep present simple for habitual action. 'Meditate' fits better than 'do meditation.' Suggestion: Say 'I usually meditate at the park.'

× Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because parks will keep my city atmosphere refreshed and people will visit parks at evening when they got free from their work.

✓ Yes, I would love to see more parks in my city because parks will keep the city's atmosphere refreshed, and people will visit parks in the evening when they are free from work.

Use 'the city's atmosphere' to show possession. Use 'in the evening' (correct preposition) and present simple 'are free' to refer to a general condition; 'got free' is incorrect past form. Maintain future reference with 'will visit' but correct surrounding grammar and articles. Suggestion: Use 'the city's atmosphere', 'in the evening', and 'are free' for clarity: 'people will visit parks in the evening when they are free from work.'

× So parks are.

✓ So parks are important.

The original fragment 'So parks are.' is incomplete and lacks a clear complement. Add an adjective or phrase to complete the sentence and convey meaning (e.g., 'important'). Suggestion: Finish the thought: 'So parks are important.'

× Yes, I would love to go to London Parks in the future because I have heard that their parks are well cleaned and maintained.

✓ Yes, I would love to visit London's parks in the future because I have heard that they are well cleaned and maintained.

Use possessive 'London's parks' or 'parks in London' rather than 'London Parks'. 'Visit' is more natural than 'go to' for attractions. Replace 'their parks' with 'they' or 'the parks' and keep present perfect 'have heard' is fine. Suggestion: Say 'visit London's parks' or 'visit the parks in London.'

× So I am thinking about that in the future I will visit London Parks.

✓ So I am thinking that in the future I will visit London's parks.

Improve word order: 'I am thinking that in the future I will visit...' Also use 'London's parks' for correct noun phrase. Maintain future simple 'will visit' for planned future action. Suggestion: Use clear word order and correct noun phrase: 'I am thinking that I will visit London's parks in the future.'