Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Speak more fluently and directly. Start with a clear topic sentence that answers the question, avoid fillers (uh, um), keep to 2–4 sentences, and add one specific detail (what games or who with) using a linking word to connect ideas.

예시: Yes. I loved going to parks as a child because I often played football with my friends there. For example, every weekend we would meet near the big oak tree and play until sunset.

제안: Answer directly and use natural phrasing. Reduce hesitation and combine ideas with a linking word (for example, because or so). Provide one specific reason or activity you do now in parks.

예시: Yes, I still visit parks sometimes when I have free time because they are a good place to relax. For instance, I often go with a friend to walk and chat after work.

제안: Give a clear, grammatical response and support it with a specific reason. Avoid repetition and fix basic grammar (e.g., 'there aren't many parks near my house'). Use a linking word to explain why more parks are needed.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks because there aren't many near my house and the existing ones are crowded. More parks would give families and children more space to relax and play.

제안: Be specific about the park and explain why you want to visit it. Avoid vague phrases and fillers; use one or two supporting details (what is special about the park or city) connected with linking words like because or for example.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the public gardens in Hyderabad in the future because I have heard they are beautiful and well maintained. For example, I want to see the gardens and historical monuments there and take photographs.

× Yes, I like, uh, when I was a child, uh, sometimes, uh, I went uh, to the park. Uh, if I went to the park, I just played, uh, beautiful games.

✓ Yes, I liked going to parks when I was a child. Sometimes I went to the park and played fun games.

The speaker mixes present tense 'I like' with past context 'when I was a child' so past tense should be used consistently. Use 'liked' for past habitual actions and simplify sentence structure. Also replace 'beautiful games' with 'fun games' for natural collocation.

× Uh, sometimes, uh, I go to the park if I have a free time, uh, I can go to the park with my friend.

✓ Sometimes I go to the park if I have free time; I can go to the park with my friends.

'Have a free time' is incorrect article usage; use 'free time' (uncountable) without 'a'. Also 'friend' likely plural 'friends' for general statements. Maintain present tense consistency and combine clauses with a semicolon or conjunction.

× Yes, I would uh, I would like how bad is there? Uh, there, there are aren't a lot of park in near my house.

✓ Yes, I would. How many parks are there? There aren't a lot of parks near my house.

The original contains several problems: unclear phrasing 'how bad is there' should be 'how many parks are there' to ask quantity; 'are aren't' is contradictory and must be one verb 'aren't'; 'a lot of park' is incorrect—use plural 'parks' or 'a lot of parkS'; 'in near my house' incorrect preposition—use 'near my house'.

× Yes, I would like to visit Hyderabad in the future. Uh, I uh, suppose that it is uh, different, uh, park I would like.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit Hyderabad in the future. I suppose there are different parks I would like to visit.

Clarify and correct noun number and structure: 'different, park I would like' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'parks' and a clear relative clause 'I would like to visit.' Maintain future intention with 'would like' and use 'suppose' with a complete clause 'there are'.