Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Corrige errores gramaticales y mejora la fluidez usando una oración temática clara y detalles específicos. Evita repeticiones y usa conectores simples si añades información. Por ejemplo, cambia "I loved go when I went" por "I loved going" y añade una razón o actividad concreta (por ejemplo, jugar en los columpios).

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks with my mother and sister when I was a child. We often played on the swings and had picnics, which made those visits very memorable.

제안: Mejora la variedad léxica y corrige la repetición y errores menores. Usa un tema claro seguido de detalles específicos y un conector para mostrar la frecuencia o el propósito (por ejemplo, "because" o "so"). Evita repetir frases como "going to a park" varias veces.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks with my friends. We usually spend a few afternoons there on weekends because it’s a relaxed place to chat and have lunch together.

제안: Corrige vocabulario inapropiado y errores gramaticales; intenta ofrecer una razón concreta y usa estructuras condicionales sencillas correctamente (por ejemplo, "I wish the government would build..." o "It would be great if the government built..."). Evita palabras incorrectas como "coal boil" y explica por qué más parques serían beneficiosos.

예시: Yes, absolutely. There is only one park in the whole city, so it would be great if the government built more parks because they would provide green spaces for families and improve people’s health.

제안: Corrige pequeñas imprecisiones en preposiciones y la repetición. Añade detalles específicos que expliquen por qué quieres ir (por ejemplo, las vistas, actividades o la ubicación) y usa conectores para dar coherencia.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the parks near the beach in Miramar because they look beautiful and offer sea views. I think it would be amazing to go there with my boyfriend and have a picnic by the shore.

× I loved go when I went to a park with my mother and my sister.

✓ I loved going to the park with my mother and my sister.

The verb 'love' followed by another verb requires the -ing form in English when describing activities (I loved going). Use 'going to the park' rather than 'go when I went to a park' to make the clause natural and concise. Also use 'the park' for a specific visit context. Suggestion: use 'love/liked + verb-ing' for habitual past activities.

× We usually spend some afternoons there, especially on weekends.

✓ We usually spend afternoons there, especially on weekends.

'Some afternoons' is not wrong but sounds less natural in this context; native speakers typically say 'spend afternoons' to describe habitual time spent. Change removes unnecessary quantifier. Suggestion: prefer 'spend afternoons' for habitual activities.

× We really enjoy going to a park and have have lunch together.

✓ We really enjoy going to the park and having lunch together.

After 'enjoy' the verb must be in -ing form: 'enjoy having'. Also remove the duplicated 'have'. Use 'the park' if referring to a specific park they visit; otherwise 'a park' is acceptable. Suggestion: 'enjoy + verb-ing' and avoid duplicated words.

× In my city there is only one park in in all the city and I think it could be great if our government could building coal boil some parks.

✓ In my city there is only one park in the whole city and I think it would be great if our government could build some parks.

Fixed multiple issues: duplicate 'in', wrong expression 'in all the city' changed to 'in the whole city' (article and phrasing), modal tense adjusted 'could building' to 'could build' (modal + base verb), and removed nonsense words 'coal boil'. Use 'would be great' or 'could be great' and 'build some parks'. Suggestion: after modal verbs like 'could' use base verb form; use 'whole' for 'entire' and avoid repeated words.

× Yes I would like to visit the parks near of the beach in Miramar.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit the parks near the beach in Miramar.

The phrase 'near of' is incorrect; use 'near' followed directly by the noun or 'near the beach'. Also include a comma after 'Yes' for natural pacing. Suggestion: use 'near the X' or 'near X' without 'of'.

× I I would love visit that place with my boyfriend.

✓ I would love to visit that place with my boyfriend.

After 'would love' the verb should be in the to-infinitive form: 'would love to visit'. Also remove the duplicated 'I'. Suggestion: use 'would love to + base verb' for expressing desires.