Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct basic grammar and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail. Avoid redundancy and incorrect words (e.g., "in pork"). Use linking words like "because" or "so" correctly.

예시: Yes, I loved going to parks as a child. My parents often took me to the city-center park because it had wide lawns and lots of trees, so we could enjoy fresh air and play freely.

제안: Make sentences complete and grammatically correct. Use a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details connected with linking words (e.g., "because" or "and"). Include time/duration correctly and finish noun phrases.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I usually cycle for about ten minutes to the park near my apartment because it has many beautiful flower beds and quiet paths where I can relax.

제안: Organize the answer with a clear reasoned structure and correct grammar. Use linking words ("because", "so", "also") and give specific examples of benefits (e.g., community events, exercise space). Avoid literal translations and extra words.

예시: Yes, I would like more parks in my city because they bring people together and create spaces for community events and exercise. For example, more parks would allow neighbors to meet regularly and children to play safely.

제안: Be precise about the place name and correct grammar. Start with a clear statement, give a specific reason, and mention what you want to see or do there. Use linking words like "because" and correct verb forms.

예시: Yes, I would like to visit a US national park in the future because I watched a documentary that showed spectacular landscapes. I especially want to hike and see the unique rock formations and wildlife there.

× Definitely when I was a child, I remembered my parents always brought me to the park in the city center because the environment is very good and the children can breathe the fresh air in pork.

✓ Definitely, when I was a child, I remember my parents always brought me to the park in the city center because the environment was very good and the children could breathe the fresh air there.

Mixed past tense usage: 'remembered' suggests a completed action while the speaker is describing habitual past events; 'remember' (simple present) or 'used to' suits recounting past habits. 'Is' should be 'was' to match past context. 'Can breathe' should be 'could breathe' for past ability. 'pork' is a typo for 'park' or 'there'; replace with 'there'. Suggest using consistent past tense for past habits: 'I remember' or 'When I was a child, my parents always brought me...' and keep verbs in past ('was', 'could').

× Yes, currently I prefer to go to the park which is near my apartment. Only need to take the bicycle about 10 minutes and there are so many beautiful flowers in.

✓ Yes, currently I prefer to go to the park near my apartment. It only takes about ten minutes by bicycle, and there are so many beautiful flowers there.

Problems: unnecessary relative 'which is' can be simplified to 'park near my apartment' (sentence structure). 'Only need to take the bicycle about 10 minutes' lacks a subject and correct verb agreement; use 'It only takes about ten minutes by bicycle.' 'in' at the end is incorrect preposition; use 'there'. Also spell out numbers under 10 optionally; ensure present tense 'prefer' matches present description.

× Yes, I prefer to see more parks around the city because it can together the people in one place and they can exchange the idea and to share some experience to with each other. Besides that there are also have the good environment.

✓ Yes, I would like to see more parks around the city because they can bring people together in one place, where they can exchange ideas and share experiences with each other. Besides that, they also provide a good environment.

Multiple issues: 'prefer to see' is awkward for wanting more parks—use 'would like to see' (tense/intent). 'it can together the people' is incorrect word order and verb choice; use 'they can bring people together'. 'exchange the idea' should be plural 'exchange ideas'. 'to share some experience to with each other' contains extra prepositions and singular/plural mismatch; use 'share experiences with each other'. 'there are also have the good environment' mixes verbs; use 'they also provide a good environment'. These are sentence structure and incorrect conjunction/word usage errors; rewrite for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, if I have the chance I would like to go to the National Park in American because I saw the documentary which describe it has a special scenery in National Park.

✓ Yes, if I have the chance, I would like to go to the national parks in America because I saw a documentary that described their special scenery.

Issues: 'National Park in American' incorrect noun/adjective forms — use 'national parks in America' or 'a national park in America'. 'I saw the documentary which describe' has tense and relative clause errors: use 'a documentary that described' (past tense) or 'that describes' depending on timing; since 'saw' is past, use 'described' or change 'saw' to 'have seen'. 'it has a special scenery in National Park' is ungrammatical; use 'their special scenery' or 'its special scenery'. Also capitalization: 'national park' generally not capitalized unless a proper name. Ensure conditional 'if I have the chance, I would like' is correct.