Parks— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and grammatical: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and correct tense/word order errors (e.g., “My parents took me”).

예시: Yes, I enjoyed going to parks as a child. My parents often took me there on weekends, and I remember playing on the swings and feeding the ducks, which made those visits very memorable.

제안: Use a clear topic sentence and connect supporting details with linking words. Fix grammar (e.g., subject-verb agreement, articles) and choose precise vocabulary (e.g., “fresh air,” “exercise in the park”). Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I still enjoy going to parks. I often visit them on weekends to exercise, because the fresh air and quiet atmosphere help me relax and boost my mood.

제안: Answer directly then give a specific reason with linking words. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., “I would like more parks to be built,” “greenery,” “well-planned”). Avoid vague phrasing like “in the long run” unless you explain it.

예시: Yes, I would like to see more parks built in my city because greenery improves air quality and makes neighbourhoods look more attractive. For example, small community parks could provide places for families to relax and children to play.

제안: Start with a clear statement of the park you want to visit, then give specific reasons and a brief example. Correct grammar and word order (e.g., “The Rock Garden in Chandigarh,” “I heard about it from a friend,” “it has many facilities”).

예시: Yes, I would like to visit the Rock Garden in Chandigarh. I heard about it from a friend and I’m interested in its sculptures and landscaped paths; I’ve also read that it has good facilities like cafes and rest areas.

× Yes, I used to when I was a child. I like to go parks on weekends and mostly my parents.

✓ Yes, I used to when I was a child. I like to go to parks on weekends, usually with my parents.

The sentence omits the preposition 'to' after 'go' and uses 'mostly my parents' awkwardly. This is a present tense/habit description: use 'go to parks' and 'usually with my parents' to indicate habitual action. Suggestion: include 'to' after 'go' and place 'with my parents' after the time/frequency phrase.

× We take take me to the park when I was a child.

✓ They used to take me to the park when I was a child.

The original mixes present 'take' with past time 'when I was a child' and repeats 'take'. Use past habitual 'used to' or past simple 'took' to match 'was'. Also correct subject from 'we' to 'they' if speaker mean parents; keep consistent subject. Suggestion: use 'They used to take me' or 'My parents took me'.

× Yeah, I often visit parks on weekends and it I do the exercise in park and it gives me the refresh air and it's give me positive vibe.

✓ Yeah, I often visit parks on weekends, and I exercise in the park; it gives me fresh air and a positive vibe.

Multiple problems: unnecessary 'it' before 'I', missing article 'the' before 'park', incorrect adjective 'refresh' should be 'fresh', and 'it's give' incorrect verb form. This is present habitual activity: use simple present 'I exercise' and 'it gives'. Also add 'a' before 'positive vibe'. Suggestion: keep verbs in simple present for routines and use correct articles and adjective forms.

× Yes, in the long run I want to see more parks will build in my cities as the I like a greenery and with the greenery the city is like well oriented and looks good.

✓ Yes, in the long run I want to see more parks built in my city, because I like greenery and it makes the city look well organized and attractive.

Original incorrectly combines 'want to see' with 'will build' (future within noun clause); better: 'see more parks built' or 'want more parks to be built'. Also 'cities' vs 'city' mismatch; use singular if speaking of own city. 'A greenery' is incorrect—'greenery' is uncountable. 'Well oriented' is awkward; use 'well organized' or 'well planned'. Suggestion: use passive 'built' after 'see' or 'want ... to be built', use uncountable 'greenery', and correct adjective usage.

× Indeed, I want to go to the rock garden is located in Chandigarh the I mostly heard about from one of my friend D Park.

✓ Indeed, I want to go to the Rock Garden located in Chandigarh; I mostly heard about it from one of my friends, D Park.

Problems: redundant 'is located' phrasing and missing 'it' after 'heard about'. 'One of my friend' should be 'one of my friends'. Capitalize proper noun 'Rock Garden'. Use semicolon or separate clauses. Suggestion: include the pronoun 'it', correct plural 'friends', and place modifiers directly after the noun.

× The rock garden is very good and also have many facilities in it.

✓ The Rock Garden is very nice and also has many facilities.

Subject-verb agreement and adjective choice: 'rock garden' singular requires 'has' not 'have'. 'Very good' is grammatical but 'nice' or 'beautiful' is more natural. Remove redundant 'in it'. Suggestion: use correct verb 'has' with singular subject and concise phrasing.