Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: You communicate that you enjoy taking pictures and want to capture the moment, but several phrases are unclear, and the answer ends without a complete idea. Start with a clear yes or no, then give one specific example. Avoid repeating “I just” and make sure each sentence is complete.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially when the scenery is striking. I usually take a photo to remember the moment, such as a beautiful sunset or a mountain landscape.

제안: You answer the question by choosing rural areas, but the comparison with urban areas is difficult to follow and the response is unfinished. Explain one clear reason for your preference, using a specific contrast—for example, quieter countryside scenery compared with crowded city buildings.

예시: I definitely prefer rural views because they feel more peaceful and open. In cities, tall buildings can make the streets feel crowded, whereas the countryside often has fields, hills, and fresh air.

제안: You express that green scenery appeals to you wherever it is, and you mention enjoying the sky, but you do not clearly compare your own country with other countries. State your preference directly—or say that you have no strong preference—and support it with one clear example. Use complete, natural phrases and avoid repeating “beautiful.”

예시: I don't have a strong preference, because I enjoy beautiful scenery in both my own country and abroad. I especially like places with lush forests and open skies. I sometimes sit outside and watch the clouds, which I find very relaxing.

× I just click the picture I just want to capture the moment.

✓ I just click the picture because I just want to capture the moment.

The original joins two complete clauses without punctuation or a conjunction. Use a conjunction such as because to show how the ideas are related and form a clear sentence.

× I think urban areas all you have is this big buildings crowding towering more here.

✓ In urban areas, all you have is these big buildings crowding and towering over the area.

The demonstrative this is singular, but buildings is plural. Use these with a plural noun. The revised sentence also clarifies the word order so the description is easier to follow.

× If it's fill with green bed and have this lush forest, it's beautiful everywhere.

✓ If it's filled with green bed and has this lush forest, it's beautiful everywhere.

In a passive construction with be, use the past participle: filled, not fill. The phrase it's filled with follows this pattern. The correction also changes have to has because its subject is the singular pronoun it.

× If it's fill with green bed and have this lush forest, it's beautiful everywhere.

✓ If it's filled with green bed and has this lush forest, it's beautiful everywhere.

The subject of have is it, a third-person singular pronoun, so the present-tense verb should be has. The correction also uses the required past participle filled after is.

× I sometimes I just sit on Mr Terrors and just stay right at the sky watching this beautiful heals that sky it's really beautiful.

✓ Sometimes I just sit on Mr Terrors and stay right at the sky watching this beautiful heals that sky. It's really beautiful.

The phrase I sometimes I repeats the subject unnecessarily; use I only once. Also, the final clause is joined to the preceding sentence without appropriate punctuation, so separate it into a new sentence. The unclear phrases have been left unchanged because their intended wording cannot be determined from the transcript.