Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is direct, natural, and well-developed. You give two clear reasons: recalling memories and sharing photos. However, avoid the awkward phrase “friends and families”; say “friends and family.” The sentence is also quite long, so use a linking word such as “In addition” to make the ideas easier to follow.

예시: Yes, absolutely. I love taking pictures of different views when I travel because they help me remember my emotions and experiences. In addition, I enjoy sharing these photos with my friends and family.

제안: You identify both preferences, but the response is unclear because the opening lacks punctuation and the ideas are repeated. “If my heart is a little bit exhausted” and “I still have like energy” are unnatural in this context. State the condition clearly: choose rural views when you feel stressed, and urban views when you want activities and energy. Use “However” to connect the contrast.

예시: It depends on my mood. When I feel stressed or exhausted from work, I prefer rural areas because the peaceful scenery helps me relax. However, when I want to feel energetic and entertained, I prefer urban areas with their lively streets and modern buildings.

제안: Your answer compares the two choices effectively and includes relevant details about landscapes, traditions, and modern attractions. However, use a clear linking phrase after “I can’t decide,” such as “because,” and say “the USA” rather than “USA.” Since you mention other countries in general, “both options” is more accurate than “both countries.” Also, “scenery” or “sights” is more natural than “sites” here.

예시: I can’t really choose because both options have their own appeal. My country has beautiful landscapes and rich cultural traditions, while other countries, such as the USA, offer diverse scenery and modern attractions. Therefore, I enjoy both, depending on the kind of experience I want.

× I love capturing many kinds of scenes when I travel, because when I look back at those photos I can recall my emotions and memories and also I like sharing those photos with my friends and families.

✓ I love capturing many kinds of scenes when I travel because, when I look back at those photos, I can recall my emotions and memories, and I also like sharing those photos with my friends and family.

Family is being used as a collective noun referring to the student's relatives as a group, so the singular form family is more appropriate here. Friends remains plural because it refers to multiple friends.

× I can't decide my own country has beautiful distinctive landscapes and cultural traditions that I love, but other countries like USA also offer surprisingly diverse sites and modern attractions so both countries have different kinds of attractions and appeal.

✓ I can't decide. My own country has beautiful, distinctive landscapes and cultural traditions that I love, but other countries also offer surprisingly diverse sites and modern attractions. Therefore, both options have different kinds of attractions and appeal.

The original sentence contains several independent clauses joined without sufficient punctuation, which creates a run-on sentence. Separating the ideas into complete sentences makes the structure clearer. Both options is more accurate than both countries because the comparison is between the student's country and other countries in general.

× I can't decide my own country has beautiful distinctive landscapes and cultural traditions that I love, but other countries like USA also offer surprisingly diverse sites and modern attractions so both countries have different kinds of attractions and appeal.

✓ I can't decide. My own country has beautiful, distinctive landscapes and cultural traditions that I love, but other countries like the USA also offer surprisingly diverse sites and modern attractions. Therefore, both options have different kinds of attractions and appeal.

USA is normally used with the definite article: the USA. The article the is part of the standard name of this country.