Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 질문에 직접 답한 뒤, 이유를 한 가지로 명확하게 설명하세요. 현재 답변은 ‘enjoy the’와 ‘view’를 반복하고 문장 구조가 불완전하며, ‘hopefully enjoy’와 ‘feel’의 사용도 자연스럽지 않습니다. ‘take photos’와 ‘enjoy the view directly’를 대비시키고, 구체적인 상황이나 이유를 연결어로 덧붙이세요.

예시: Not really. When I see a beautiful view, I usually prefer to enjoy it directly rather than take pictures. However, I sometimes take a photo so I can remember the experience later.

제안: ‘Little Area’와 ‘noodle area’는 문맥에 맞지 않으므로 ‘rural areas’와 ‘urban areas’로 정확히 표현해야 합니다. 또한 ‘scenery’는 셀 수 없는 명사이므로 ‘many beautiful scenery’ 대신 ‘beautiful scenery’ 또는 ‘many beautiful views’를 사용하세요. 첫 문장에서 선호를 분명히 밝히고, ‘because’와 ‘whereas’를 사용해 자연 환경과 도시의 혼잡함을 구체적으로 비교하세요.

예시: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy peaceful surroundings and beautiful natural scenery. There are usually fewer crowds, so I can relax and appreciate the view. In contrast, urban areas can feel noisy and congested.

제안: 핵심 내용과 이유가 비교적 명확하고, ‘So’를 사용해 결과도 제시한 점은 좋습니다. 다만 ‘I prefer I prefer’의 반복을 제거하고, ‘prefer to view’ 대신 ‘prefer the views in my country’를 사용하세요. ‘scenery’는 불가산 명사이므로 ‘There is a lot of natural scenery’라고 말하며, 본인의 나라에서 볼 수 있는 구체적인 예를 하나 추가하면 답변이 더 효과적입니다.

예시: I prefer the views in my own country because it offers a good balance between natural landscapes and modern cities. I can enjoy beaches, mountains, and lively city centers without traveling far. As a result, I can experience a wide variety of scenery in one country.

× To be honest, I don't prefer to take a photo when I enjoy the when I enjoy the different view, I usually hopefully enjoy this view, feel or just the feeling.

✓ To be honest, I don't usually take photos when I enjoy different views. I just enjoy the views and the feeling of being there.

The original sentence contains repeated and incomplete clauses, such as 'when I enjoy the' and 'feel or just the feeling.' These clauses do not form a clear grammatical structure. Use complete sentences with one main idea in each sentence.

× To be honest, I don't prefer to take a photo when I enjoy the when I enjoy the different view, I usually hopefully enjoy this view, feel or just the feeling.

✓ To be honest, I don't usually take photos when I enjoy different views. I just enjoy the views and the feeling of being there.

The plural nouns 'photos' and 'views' are more appropriate when speaking about taking pictures and enjoying different kinds of scenery in general. Match singular and plural nouns with the intended meaning.

× I usually hopefully enjoy this view.

✓ I usually enjoy the view.

The adverb 'usually' should be placed before the main verb 'enjoy.' 'Hopefully' does not fit the intended meaning here, so it should be omitted. Place frequency adverbs such as 'usually' before the main verb.

× I prefer views about Little Area because I like a beautiful natural scenery.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I like beautiful natural scenery.

Use the preposition 'in' to describe views located in an area. 'Views about an area' means views concerning that area, not views located there.

× I prefer views about Little Area because I like a beautiful natural scenery.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I like beautiful natural scenery.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun, so it does not normally take the article 'a.' Say 'beautiful natural scenery,' not 'a beautiful natural scenery.'

× In case of noodle area there are many beautiful scenery.

✓ In urban areas, there is a lot of beautiful scenery.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun, so use 'there is' rather than 'there are.' The quantity expression 'a lot of' is also suitable for uncountable nouns.

× There are many beautiful scenery.

✓ There is a lot of beautiful scenery.

'Many' is used with countable plural nouns, but 'scenery' is uncountable. Use 'a lot of' or 'much' with 'scenery.' In natural English, 'a lot of beautiful scenery' is more common.

× In case of noodle area there are many beautiful scenery and then I don't like crowded clouded scenery I think around.

✓ In urban areas, there is a lot of beautiful scenery, but I don't like crowded urban scenery.

The conjunction 'but' is needed to show the contrast between liking beautiful scenery and disliking crowded scenery. 'And then' does not clearly express this contrast.

× In case of noodle area there are many beautiful scenery and then I don't like crowded clouded scenery I think around.

✓ In urban areas, there is a lot of beautiful scenery, but I don't like crowded urban scenery.

The original sentence lacks clear punctuation and contains an incomplete ending, 'I think around.' Organize the ideas into a complete sentence with a clear subject, verb, and conjunction.

× I prefer I prefer to view in my country.

✓ I prefer views in my country.

The phrase 'I prefer I prefer' repeats the subject and verb. Also, 'to view' is a verb, but the sentence needs the noun 'views.' Avoid repetition and use the correct part of speech.

× There are many natural scenery in my country.

✓ There is a lot of natural scenery in my country.

'Scenery' is an uncountable noun, so it takes 'there is,' not 'there are.' Use 'a lot of' instead of 'many' with this noun.

× There are many natural scenery in my country.

✓ There is a lot of natural scenery in my country.

'Many' must modify a countable plural noun. Because 'scenery' is uncountable, use 'a lot of natural scenery' instead.