Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Answer directly, then give one or two specific reasons. Replace unclear or incorrect expressions such as “new prays,” “other architectures,” and “look it back.” Use “places,” “buildings,” and “look back at the photos.” Also, use a linking word such as “because” or “Moreover” to connect your ideas, and avoid repeating “some pictures.”

예시: Yes, I do. I often take photos of interesting places, such as shrines, temples, and historic buildings. I also enjoy photographing nature because the pictures help me remember beautiful trips. Moreover, I like looking back at them in my free time.

제안: State your preference clearly and explain it with natural, specific vocabulary. “Nature” is uncountable, so say “there is a lot of nature” or “there are many natural attractions.” Improve “flowers with plants” to “flowers and plants,” and avoid the confusing final sentence. A clear contrast using “although” or “whereas” would make the answer more coherent.

예시: I prefer rural areas because they are quieter and have more natural scenery. I enjoy looking at flowers and plants, and I sometimes search online to learn their names. Although cities have parks and flower gardens, rural landscapes usually feel more peaceful and less artificial.

제안: Give a direct answer and avoid repetition, such as repeating “see” and “exciting.” Use plural agreement in “styles ... are,” and replace “this of seeing of new things” with “seeing new things.” Add a specific example of a different country or type of scenery to make your supporting detail more effective.

예시: I prefer seeing views in other countries because their architecture and natural environments are often very different from those in Japan. For example, I would love to see the historic streets of Italy or the dramatic mountains of New Zealand. Exploring unfamiliar scenery makes travelling more exciting for me.

× I often take some pictures in many new prays such as shrines, temples or other architectures.

✓ I often take some pictures at many new places, such as shrines, temples, or other architectural sites.

Use at rather than in when referring to specific locations where pictures are taken. Places is the correct plural noun in this context. Architecture is generally uncountable, so architectural sites is more grammatically appropriate when referring to different buildings or locations.

× I also take some pictures of nature And I love to look it back when I feel free and it reminds me of the memory of it.

✓ I also take some pictures of nature, and I love to look back at them when I have free time because they remind me of those memories.

The phrasal verb is look back at, so the preposition at is required. Them is needed because it refers to the plural noun pictures. The plural pronoun they is also needed because pictures remind the speaker of memories. Use have free time rather than feel free when referring to available time.

× I prefer rural areas because there are many natures there.

✓ I prefer rural areas because there is a lot of nature there.

Nature is normally an uncountable noun, so it does not usually take the plural form natures. Because nature is uncountable, use there is and a lot of rather than there are and many.

× I love watching flowers with plants and sometimes search the name of it.

✓ I love watching flowers and plants, and I sometimes search for their names.

Use and to connect the two nouns flowers and plants. Search normally takes the preposition for when referring to information being sought. Their is the correct possessive pronoun because it refers to the plural nouns flowers and plants.

× Of course in urban in city area there are many flowers there some flowers or but it's not natural.

✓ Of course, there are many flowers in urban areas, but they are not natural.

The correct prepositional phrase is in urban areas, not in urban in city area. Areas must be plural because the sentence refers generally to urban locations. Use but to show the contrast between the existence of flowers and their lack of naturalness. They correctly refers to the plural noun flowers.

× I prefer to see that see the view of other countries because the styles of architecture or environment is completely different from Japan.

✓ I prefer to see the views of other countries because their architecture and environment are completely different from those in Japan.

The repeated phrase that see makes the sentence structure incorrect; use the views directly after see. Use and because both architecture and environment are being compared. The plural subject architecture and environment requires are. Those in Japan is needed to compare the views, architecture, and environment of other countries with equivalent things in Japan.

× I can feel excited because this of seeing of new things and it is so exciting.

✓ I feel excited because I can see new things, and it is very exciting.

The phrase this of seeing of new things does not form a grammatical clause. Use the subject I followed by the modal verb can and the base verb see. The corrected sentence has a clear subject and verb in each clause, and it avoids the incorrect preposition of.