Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear, relevant, and well developed. You give several specific reasons and use linking words effectively. However, “try taking photos with different angles” is slightly unnatural; say “try to take photos from different angles.” Also, “get a perfect shot” may sound a little exaggerated, so “capture the best possible image” would be more natural.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially when I travel. They help me remember special moments and beautiful places, and I often share them with my friends on social media. I also enjoy experimenting with different angles and lighting to capture the best possible image.

제안: Your answer contains relevant details, but the main idea is contradictory: farmland, crops, and open spaces are features of rural areas, not urban areas. You should choose one option and explain it directly. There is also a run-on sentence, and “its” should be “their” if you are referring to urban areas. Use linking words and shorter sentences to make the answer easier to follow.

예시: I prefer views in rural areas because they are peaceful and spacious. There are large fields, green crops, and a wide variety of fruits and vegetables, which make the landscape very attractive. In contrast, urban areas are usually more crowded and dominated by buildings and traffic.

제안: You mention both your country and other countries, but your preference is not clear. The answer also contains repetition (“beautiful beautiful”), inaccurate or unclear place names, and several incomplete phrases, such as “Also inspired Different national parks are really spaces.” State your preference first, then give one or two accurate examples, such as Murree, Islamabad, or Pakistan’s national parks. Use complete sentences and avoid adding details that you cannot express clearly.

예시: I prefer views in my own country because Pakistan has a great variety of beautiful landscapes. For example, Murree has green hills and pleasant weather, while the northern areas offer spectacular mountains and valleys. However, I would also like to explore views in other countries in the future.

× I try taking photos with different angles and lighting to get a perfect shot.

✓ I try taking photos from different angles and in different lighting conditions to get a perfect shot.

When describing the position or viewpoint from which a photograph is taken, use from different angles rather than with different angles. The preposition in is also more natural before lighting conditions.

× I prefer views in urban areas because of its natural scenery and open spaces.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because of their natural scenery and open spaces.

The possessive pronoun must agree with its antecedent. Urban areas is plural, so use their, not its. Use its only with a singular noun.

× I prefer views in urban areas because of its natural scenery and open spaces there are large tracts of farmland, crops and grasses and a wide range of fruits and vegetables which make the landscape very attractive and peaceful.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because of their natural scenery and open spaces. There are large tracts of farmland, crops, grasses, and a wide range of fruits and vegetables, which make the landscape very attractive and peaceful.

The original sentence joins two complete clauses without suitable punctuation, creating a run-on sentence. Separate the clauses with a full stop, or connect them with an appropriate conjunction. Commas also help separate the items in the list.

× There are a lot of beautiful beautiful sceneries in Pakistan.

✓ There is a lot of beautiful scenery in Pakistan.

Scenery is an uncountable noun and normally does not take a plural -s. Use a lot of beautiful scenery. Because scenery is singular and uncountable, use there is rather than there are.

× There are a lot of beautiful beautiful sceneries in Pakistan.

✓ There is a lot of beautiful scenery in Pakistan.

The there-be construction must agree with the noun that follows it. Scenery is an uncountable singular noun, so the correct form is there is. Use there are with plural countable nouns, such as there are many beautiful places.

× Also inspired Different national parks are really spaces.

✓ Also, different national parks are really inspiring places.

The original sentence has an incorrect word order and does not form a clear grammatical structure. Place the subject different national parks before the verb are, use also in a natural position, and use the complete noun phrase inspiring places.