Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is enthusiastic and well developed, with relevant examples. However, use more natural expressions: say “preserve special moments” instead of “preserve social movements,” “I’m always drawn to places” instead of “I’m always grown to places,” and “breathtaking views” instead of “breath breaking views.” Avoid unnecessary capitalization in “green mountains.”

예시: Absolutely. I love taking pictures of beautiful scenery, especially lush green mountains, waterfalls, and peaceful countryside landscapes. Photographs allow me to preserve special moments and revisit them whenever I feel nostalgic. Since I appreciate nature, I’m always drawn to places with breathtaking views.

제안: You answer the question directly and provide a clear comparison between rural and urban areas. Your linking word “Unlike” is effective. Improve the phrase “that side of Green Mountains” by saying “the sight of green mountains,” and use lowercase for “green mountains” and “paddy fields.” Add an article where necessary and keep the description natural.

예시: I’d definitely prefer rural views because I find them much more peaceful and refreshing than busy urban landscapes. I love seeing green mountains, paddy fields, and wide-open spaces. Unlike cities, which are often crowded and noisy, the countryside allows me to unwind and reconnect with nature.

제안: The answer begins with a strong contrast and includes specific examples from Sri Lanka. However, it is incomplete because it ends with “However,” and “nature scenery” should be “natural scenery.” Check the word “Bristol,” which may be an unintended choice; “beautiful” or “pristine” beaches would be more appropriate. Finish with a concluding reason to make the response complete and coherent.

예시: Although I’d love to explore breathtaking landscapes abroad, I have a special affection for the views in my own country, Sri Lanka. It offers incredible natural scenery, from misty mountains and pristine beaches to lush tea plantations. I especially prefer these places because they are familiar to me and reflect the country’s unique beauty.

× Since I appreciate nature, I'm always grown to places with breath breaking views.

✓ Since I appreciate nature, I'm always drawn to places with breathtaking views.

Drawn is the correct past participle of draw and means attracted to something. Breathtaking is a compound adjective and should be written as one word when it describes views.

× I love that side of Green Mountains, Paddy fields and open spaces.

✓ I love the sight of green mountains, paddy fields, and open spaces.

The definite article the is needed before sight because the sentence refers to a particular visual scene. Green mountains and paddy fields are common nouns here, so they should not be capitalized unless they are part of official place names.

× It has an incredible variety of nature scenery, from misty mountains to Bristol beaches and lush tea plantations.

✓ It has an incredible variety of natural scenery, from misty mountains to beautiful beaches and lush tea plantations.

Natural is the correct adjective before scenery. Scenery is an uncountable noun, so it is not normally used with nature in this structure. The phrase beautiful beaches is grammatically appropriate; Bristol should only be used if the beaches are specifically located in Bristol.

× However.

✓ However, I also enjoy exploring landscapes in other countries.

However by itself is not a complete sentence because it does not contain a subject and a verb. It must connect to a complete clause, or it should be removed if no contrasting idea follows.