Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cải thiện: tránh tiếng ậm ơ và các từ lặp (ví dụ: "umm", "uh") để câu nghe tự nhiên hơn; dùng câu chủ đề rõ ràng rồi bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể; sửa ngữ pháp và từ vựng như "store memories" → "preserve memories"; giữ câu ngắn gọn (tối đa 5 câu). Cụ thể: bắt đầu bằng câu trực tiếp trả lời câu hỏi, rồi nêu lý do và một ví dụ ngắn gọn.

예시: Yes, I really enjoy taking photos of different views because they capture unique moments and preserve memories. For example, when I travel to the mountains I photograph the sunrise to remember the colors and atmosphere.

제안: Cải thiện: sửa lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc (ví dụ: "Beside" → "Besides"; tránh lặp từ như "I I"); thêm liên từ để mạch lạc; cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể về lý do (ví dụ: noise level, scenery) và giữ tối đa 5 câu.

예시: I prefer rural views because they offer peace and cleaner air compared with the city. Besides, I enjoy walking through fields and listening to birds, which helps me relax after a busy week.

제안: Cải thiện: công thức câu thiếu rõ ràng và có lỗi ngữ pháp (ví dụ: "becoming" sai; câu cuối không hoàn chỉnh); hãy nêu trực tiếp lựa chọn, giải thích vì sao bằng các chi tiết cụ thể, và nếu muốn so sánh với nước ngoài thì đưa ví dụ cụ thể; tránh câu dang dở.

예시: To be honest, I prefer the landscapes in my own country because they are very diverse and breathtaking, from mountains to coastal areas. However, I also enjoy visiting other countries for different architectural views and cultural scenes.

× I really like taking pictures of different views, umm, because they are interesting and I can uh, store it, umm, many umm, memories.

✓ I really like taking pictures of different views because they are interesting and I can store many memories.

Incorrect use of the article and pronoun: 'store it' is wrong because 'memories' is plural and needs no singular pronoun; 'many memories' does not require an article. Suggestion: remove 'it' and place 'many' directly before 'memories'. Note: Also remove filler words like 'umm' for clarity.

× For example, Ioffer.

✓ For example, I offer them.

Sentence is incomplete and misspelt: 'Ioffer' should be two words 'I offer' and needs an object to be grammatical. Suggestion: add an appropriate object such as 'them' or 'my photos' to complete the sentence.

× Well personally I prefer views in rural areas because I like peaceful atmosphere and fresh air.

✓ Well, personally I prefer views in rural areas because I like the peaceful atmosphere and fresh air.

Missing definite article: 'peaceful atmosphere' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific, known atmosphere of rural areas. Suggestion: add 'the' before 'peaceful atmosphere'. Also add commas around 'personally' for clarity.

× Beside I I want to walking in the countryside.

✓ Besides, I want to walk in the countryside.

Incorrect phrase and verb form: use 'Besides' (not 'Beside') for adding information; 'want to walking' is wrong because 'want to' must be followed by the base form 'walk'. Suggestion: use 'Besides, I want to walk...' and remove the duplicate 'I'.

× To be honest, I prefer views in my country becoming the landscape are very beautiful and the scenery is breathtaking.

✓ To be honest, I prefer views in my country because the landscapes are very beautiful and the scenery is breathtaking.

Incorrect conjunction and subject-verb agreement: 'becoming' is wrong here; the intended conjunction is 'because'. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to agree with 'are'. Suggestion: replace 'becoming' with 'because' and use plural 'landscapes are'. Also keep 'scenery is' as singular.

× Views however, in other countries have many.

✓ Views in other countries, however, also have much to offer.

Incomplete and awkward sentence: 'have many' is incomplete because 'many' needs a noun. Better phrasing is 'have much to offer' or 'also have many beautiful sights'. Suggestion: restructure to 'Views in other countries, however, also have much to offer.'