Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, with good reasons and personal feelings. To improve, correct minor phrasing errors, avoid repetition, and tighten the response to be more natural and concise (maximum ~3–4 sentences). Use linking words smoothly and give one specific example to enrich content.

예시: I love capturing beautiful scenery when I travel because photos help me remember places and moments. I also enjoy sharing selected shots with friends online, especially skyline photos taken at sunset. For example, last summer I photographed a mountain lake at dawn and adjusted my angle to capture the reflection, which made the image more memorable.

제안: Good direct answer and reasons, but there are grammar mistakes and a slightly repetitive structure. Improve by fixing grammar (e.g., 'prefer urban views to rural ones'), use a linking phrase for coherence, and add one specific example of an urban scene you like.

예시: I prefer urban views to rural ones because the city skyline at night fascinates me, particularly when buildings light up. For instance, I enjoy photographing the downtown skyline from the riverside at dusk because the reflections and architectural details create dramatic images.

제안: Clear opinion with reasons, but phrasing is slightly awkward and repetitive. Improve by using more natural expressions (e.g., 'in other countries' rather than 'in another country') and by giving a concrete example or brief explanation of what feels different abroad. Keep it concise and link ideas smoothly.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because exploring unfamiliar places feels exciting and liberating. For example, visiting Japan last year opened my eyes to different cityscapes and cultural details, which gave me a fresh perspective compared with sights at home.

× I definitely love capturing beautiful sceneries whenever I travel because it helps me remember the places that I have visited.

✓ I definitely love capturing beautiful scenery whenever I travel because it helps me remember the places that I have visited.

The noun 'scenery' is uncountable and should not be pluralized as 'sceneries.' Use the uncountable form 'scenery.' Suggestion: treat landscape/scene as countable if you need plural (e.g., 'beautiful scenes').

× Apart from that, I love sharing it with my friends and posting it on post it online.

✓ Apart from that, I love sharing them with my friends and posting them online.

There are two issues: 'it' refers to multiple photos, so use plural pronoun 'them.' 'Posting it on post it online' is incorrect phrasing; remove redundant 'post it' and use 'posting them online.' Also ensure pronoun number matches noun ('photos' implied).

× And photography as a hobby is very relaxing for me and I like to play with some shots to get the right angle.

✓ And photography as a hobby is very relaxing for me, and I like to play with shots to get the right angle.

The original is mostly correct but 'some shots' is acceptable; revised version adds a comma for clarity. No major grammatical error; this suggestion focuses on clarity and punctuation. Maintain subject-verb agreement: 'photography ... is' and 'I like' are correct.

× Well, I definitely prefer the urban views than the rural area simply because I there is something in the city skyline at night that I really find fascinating, especially when all the lights are lit up in the evening.

✓ Well, I definitely prefer urban views to rural areas simply because there is something about the city skyline at night that I find really fascinating, especially when all the lights are lit up in the evening.

Multiple issues: use 'prefer A to B' rather than 'prefer A than B.' Make noun numbers consistent: 'urban views' and 'rural areas.' Remove extraneous 'I' before 'there is.' Add 'about' after 'something' for natural phrasing. Also move 'really' before 'fascinating' for typical adverb placement.

× And I also love to see interesting architecture.

✓ I also love seeing interesting architecture.

Both forms are acceptable, but 'love seeing' is more natural for general preferences. This change improves naturalness by using the gerund after 'love' for habitual actions.

× I prefer the views in another country simply because it is an exciting and a liberating feeling.

✓ I prefer the views in another country simply because it is an exciting and liberating feeling.

Do not use 'an' before both adjectives when they share the same noun; use 'an exciting and liberating feeling.' Also 'views in another country' is fine; ensure article use is consistent.

× Being in a foreign land and traveling in other country gives you a fresh and a different perspective in life.

✓ Being in a foreign land and traveling in another country gives you a fresh and different perspective on life.

Use 'another country' (with article) rather than 'other country.' Remove extra 'a' before 'different' because adjectives share the noun. Use 'perspective on life' as the correct prepositional phrase.