Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Reduce fillers (uh, um) and avoid trailing or incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Also correct grammar (e.g., 'panoramic views', 'it is really interesting').

예시: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, when I travel with friends I like capturing panoramic views of mountains and city skylines because those scenes feel relaxing and memorable. However, the final result often depends on the camera or the skill of the person taking the photo, so I sometimes ask a friend to help.

제안: Answer directly with a clear preference or say you like both, then give one or two specific reasons using linking words. Remove fillers and fix grammar (e.g., 'city lights', 'the countryside', 'both have their own unique qualities'). Keep to 2–4 sentences for clarity.

예시: I like both urban and rural views because each offers different photographic opportunities. For instance, city lights create dramatic night-time photos, while the countryside provides calm, natural scenes ideal for landscape shots. Therefore I choose based on the mood I want to capture.

제안: State your preference clearly and support it with specific reasons and one example. Avoid word errors ('abuse' is incorrect) and reduce repetitions like 'I think so'. Use linking words such as 'because' and 'for example'. Keep it concise (2–3 sentences).

예시: I prefer views in my own country because I feel more connected to the culture and landscape, and there are many places I have not explored yet. For example, I would love to visit nearby national parks to photograph unique natural scenes and local wildlife.

× Yes, I love to take pictures of different scenery around me.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different scenery around me.

The original uses 'love to take' which is not wrong but 'love taking' is more natural when describing a habitual preference. Use the gerund form after verbs of preference (love, like, enjoy) to sound more fluent.

× Uh, particularly when I'm traveling and going with my friends.

✓ Particularly when I'm traveling with my friends.

The original phrase 'traveling and going with my friends' is redundant and awkward. Remove 'going' and keep 'traveling with my friends' to produce a concise, grammatically correct clause.

× I have seen lots of different panoramic view uh, so I think so that will be really interested and it makes me relax as well.

✓ I have seen lots of different panoramic views, so I think they are really interesting and they help me relax.

Multiple issues: 'view' should be plural to match 'lots of'; 'that will be really interested' is incorrect because 'interested' describes a person, not a view. Use 'interesting' to describe the views. Also 'it makes me relax' should be 'they help me relax' to agree in number and use a correct verb construction.

× It depends upon the camera though.

✓ It depends on the camera though.

Use 'depend on' rather than 'depend upon' in this informal context. Both can be correct, but 'depend on' is more natural here.

× If I have a really good camera or person with me, they can.

✓ If I have a really good camera or if a skilled person is with me, we can take great photos.

The original sentence ends abruptly and is unclear: 'or person with me, they can.' Clarify the condition and result: specify 'skilled person' and complete the main clause showing what 'they' can do.

× Honestly speaking, it depends upon urban or rural area on my board because sometimes I find a city light uh is really good to take a picture during night time, but umm sometimes I feel really calm and relaxed nature.

✓ Honestly speaking, it depends on whether the area is urban or rural because sometimes I find city lights are really good for taking pictures at night, but other times I feel calm and relaxed in nature.

Multiple preposition and phrasing errors: 'depends upon' -> 'depends on'; 'urban or rural area on my board' is unclear—use 'whether the area is urban or rural'; 'city light' should be plural 'city lights'; 'to take a picture during night time' -> 'for taking pictures at night'; 'calm and relaxed nature' -> 'calm and relaxed in nature' to correctly use prepositions.

× So that time I usually prefer taking pictures at countryside.

✓ At those times I usually prefer taking pictures in the countryside.

Use 'those times' (plural) to match 'usually' and 'in the countryside' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also include 'the' before 'countryside'.

× So actually absolutely both has their own unique way of.

✓ So actually both absolutely have their own unique qualities.

'Both' requires a plural verb: 'have' not 'has'. The original ends with an incomplete phrase 'way of.' Use 'qualities' or 'ways' to complete the thought.

× I prefer abuse in a in my own country because I feel I'm more connected to my country and there are so many places yet to explore I haven't seen them.

✓ I prefer sightseeing in my own country because I feel more connected to it, and there are so many places I haven't seen yet that I still want to explore.

'Abuse' is likely a mispronunciation of 'a bus' or 'abroad' or 'sightseeing'; context suggests 'sightseeing' or 'to travel'—here 'sightseeing' fits. Avoid repeating 'my country'—use pronoun 'it'. Reorder 'yet to explore I haven't seen them' into 'places I haven't seen yet that I still want to explore' for clarity.

× So I think so if I get an opportunity to see these places I will definitely go and there is lot of thing in our nature also to see.

✓ So I think if I get an opportunity to see these places, I will definitely go, and there are a lot of natural attractions to see in our country.

Make conditional structure clear: 'if I get an opportunity' then 'I will definitely go'. Use 'there are a lot of' for count/quantity and 'natural attractions' or 'natural scenery' instead of 'lot of thing in our nature'. Also add commas to separate clauses for readability.