Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 表达较自然但有冗长和语法不完整的地方。应注意句子简洁、语法连贯和时态一致。可使用一到两句主题句后加入一两条具体细节并用连接词衔接，例如说明拍摄的目的、常用的拍摄对象或常用的设备。避免重复短语（如“when I travel...when I see...”）并修正句尾不完整。

예시: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I usually photograph landscapes when I travel so I can remember the atmosphere, and later looking at the pictures helps me recall the details and emotions of that trip.

제안: 回答内容明确但语法和用词多处错误，填充词较多，句子结构不完整。应减少语气词，使用正确时态和复数形式（pictures, architecture），并用连接词（however, while）把城市和乡村对比得更清楚。可举一两个具体例子说明喜欢的景观类型或拍摄角度。

예시: I enjoy both urban and rural views. For example, in Hong Kong I like photographing modern skyscrapers and unique architecture, while in Yunnan I prefer capturing mountains and traditional villages because they have rich colours and textures.

제안: 答案含糊且句子未完成，存在重复和填充词。需要给出完整的对比理由並用具体细节支持，例如说明国内外各自吸引你的方面。注意句子完整性和词汇精确（natural scenery而非 natural sceneries provided）。

예시: I like both domestic and foreign views. For instance, places in my country like Dali and Kunming offer beautiful natural scenery and cultural landscapes, while Japan impressed me with its well-preserved temples and seasonal colours, so I took many photos there as well.

× Yes, when I travel with my family or by myself, I usually take a lot of pictures of the views because I want to remember this moment and when I see other pictures in the future, I can always feel the atmosphere of that moment and think about.

✓ Yes. When I travel with my family or by myself, I usually take a lot of pictures of the views because I want to remember the moment. When I see those pictures in the future, I can always feel the atmosphere of that time and think about it.

句子过长且结构混乱，缺少合适的分句连接和代词指代。将句子拆成两句并补全缺失的代词（it），使信息更清晰易懂。建议使用短句并注意代词指代和时态一致。

× I think both, uh, when I go to Hong Kong, I take a lot of picture of the urban city and this, umm, different architectures.

✓ I think both. When I go to Hong Kong, I take a lot of pictures of the urban city and its different architectures.

“picture”应为复数“pictures”（与动作频率一致），且“architectures”用法不当，改为“its different architectures”或更常见的“different architectural styles/ buildings”。同时用句号分隔停顿词，保持句子完整。

× Well, when I went to umm, Yunnan and some places in Yunnan, I take a lot of picture of the, of the natural.

✓ Well, when I went to Yunnan and some places there, I took a lot of pictures of the natural scenery.

前半句使用过去时（went），后半句应保持过去时一致（took）。“picture”应为复数“pictures”。“the natural”不完整，需补全为“the natural scenery”或“natural landscapes”。建议时态一致并使用完整名词短语。

× I think also both umm, there are many beautiful places in my own country such as Dali, Kunming, and they provided the, the views of the natural sceneries umm, and at the same time, when I went to uh, Japan, I took a lot of pictures of.

✓ I think both as well. There are many beautiful places in my country such as Dali and Kunming, which offer natural scenery. At the same time, when I went to Japan, I took a lot of pictures.

原句句子结构混乱，代词和动词形式不匹配（they provided → which offer/that offer），并且最后一句不完整（took a lot of pictures of → 需接宾语或直接去掉 of）。将句子重构为更自然的表达，注意从句连接和宾语完整性。