Views— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid redundancy and fix errors (e.g., 'a beautiful pictures', 'in the HD version').

예시: I don't usually take photos of views; I prefer to enjoy them with my eyes. Also, I don't own a good camera, so I haven't tried photographing landscapes in high quality.

제안: Answer directly and complete your idea. Use singular/plural correctly and add a linking phrase to support your opinion. Provide a brief specific detail about why urban views appeal to you.

예시: I prefer urban views to rural ones because modern skyscrapers and bridges show interesting architectural details. For example, I enjoy how glass facades reflect light and create dramatic cityscapes at night.

제안: Give a clear topic sentence and provide specific reasons with correct tense and phrasing. Use linking words to connect ideas and one concrete example of what you want to see abroad.

예시: I prefer views in other countries because they offer new scenery and cultural differences. For instance, after living in the Philippines for over twenty years, I would love to photograph European old towns with their historic streets and unique architecture.

× I don't like taking pictures of different views, I would just like to see it for my eyes and I really don't have a camera or device that would allow me to capture a beautiful pictures in an HD version, so I didn't really try to take one.

✓ I don't like taking pictures of different views; I would just like to see them with my own eyes, and I really don't have a camera or device that would allow me to capture beautiful pictures in HD, so I didn't really try to take any.

Errors: incorrect article use ('a beautiful pictures' should be 'beautiful pictures' or 'a beautiful picture'); wrong pronoun number ('it' referring to 'views' should be 'them'); awkward phrase 'for my eyes' better as 'with my own eyes'; 'in an HD version' is unnatural — use 'in HD'; 'one' ambiguous, use 'any' with plural 'pictures'. Suggestion: match singular/plural pronouns to nouns, remove unnecessary articles before uncountable or plural nouns, and use natural collocations (e.g., 'in HD', 'with my own eyes').

× I would prefer to take a nice view of an urban areas than rural ones, because I think a skyscraper is much more fascinating in sense of architectural and.

✓ I would prefer to see a nice view of urban areas rather than rural ones, because I think skyscrapers are much more fascinating in terms of architecture.

Errors: 'a urban areas' mixes singular article with plural noun — use 'urban areas' without 'a' or use singular 'an urban area'; 'take a nice view' is unnatural — use 'see' or 'view'; 'a skyscraper is much more fascinating in sense of architectural and' has subject-verb and article issues and incomplete phrase. Use plural 'skyscrapers are' to match general statement and 'in terms of architecture' for correct expression. Suggestion: ensure articles match count (a/an for singular), use plural verbs for general plural subjects, and complete comparative phrases ('in terms of').

× I would like to take a view of different countries because it is new in the eye and I have been living in the Philippines for more than two decades now, so I seen a lot and it's time to view another country and explore their beauties.

✓ I would like to see views of different countries because they would be new to me, and I have been living in the Philippines for more than two decades now, so I have seen a lot and it's time to visit another country and explore its beauties.

Errors: 'take a view' is unnatural — use 'see views' or 'visit'; 'it is new in the eye' incorrect pronoun and expression; use plural 'they' for 'views' or 'countries' and 'new to me'; 'so I seen a lot' uses wrong verb form — correct is 'I have seen a lot' (present perfect); 'explore their beauties' should match singular 'another country' with 'its beauties' or change to plural. Suggestion: use correct present perfect for experiences, match pronouns to their antecedents, and choose natural collocations ('visit a country', 'see views').